10/10 moar

6079331 And I shall make moar.

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6079343 Naow?

6079346 No, not naow.

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6079364 naow?

6079478 Not naow.

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And when I say soon, I mean some time between this week and next week. But still. Soon.

6079515 how about naow in 3 days?

Fallout New Vegas: Old World Blues; reference much?

6079769 crossover tag for a reason. Loved that game so hard!

6079524 Sure, I can do that. That or the weekend. School and all. Only reason I got one out today was because I slept in and missed.

6080395 I don't even have school

Hmm...this is interesting, but it has a serious flaw. You're skipping perhaps a full half of the story with the strong lack of descriptions and fleshing out of things, or skipping a reaction entirely.

Most notably, there is no real sense of his response to The Stare at all. Fluttershy just does it, then he picks her up and asks her not to do it again. There was no touching on his reaction or emotion. This is kind of a glaring oversight in regards to fleshing out the story.

As I said, this is interesting so far, but you're lacking a lot of substance in regards to characters and reactions. Without such things, there's little real depth to explore and not much for a reader to connect with the characters. Put some more effort into expressing the non-verbal aspects of the story and it'll sing much brighter.

OMG THE FALLOUT: NEW VEGAS REFERENCE IS REAL!!!!!