5847241 yeah, I was kind of thinking of that too. To be completely honest, I'm trying to get as much practice as I can. These stories will got through revising. Especially the transitions. If you care enough about these, just look in every now and then.
(I will add the word 'updated' to the end of a chapter name when It is rewritten and improved.)

the octavia walking in part was just awesome. i'd do the exact same thing lmfao

5851826 hah! Gald to see you enjoyed it. I thought the story needed a funny part.