Cute chapter. Good thing the elder us so forgiving or that could have ended badly. Given my sense of dramatic timing, the only time those bad ponies could ever strike would be in the middle of her "rites". Also, errors ahoy. If it wasn't for the fact I'd be busy all the next two days, I'd send you some mistakes to fix. Finally, something something pacing is all over the place. Some parts feel like they drag on and others are over in what feels like an instant. Their little library adventure took forever compared to the other 3ish parts which took about half.
Cute chapter. Good thing the elder us so forgiving or that could have ended badly. Given my sense of dramatic timing, the only time those bad ponies could ever strike would be in the middle of her "rites".
Also, errors ahoy. If it wasn't for the fact I'd be busy all the next two days, I'd send you some mistakes to fix.
Finally, something something pacing is all over the place. Some parts feel like they drag on and others are over in what feels like an instant. Their little library adventure took forever compared to the other 3ish parts which took about half.