Well, you're good at getting to the reader's emotions, but you're having trouble with characterization. Celestia is ridiculously out of character, and I think that's what's causing your downvotes. You're making her vengeful, uncaring, greedy, and jealous simply for the sake of plot. I know it's tagged Alternate Universe, but you can't hide behind the AU tag as an excuse. It's only acceptable if the character differences are the premise of the story, and you haven't established that this is the case. So far, you haven't actually shown how this is different from the actual storyline, at least not clearly.

I guess it all depends on how you handle things from here on out. If you can pull it off, people should be able to look past her behavior, and I guess chalk it up to youth and resulting immaturity or something.

Also, if they're that young, when did they beat Discord? Or is that where the AU tag comes in?

2902533 Thank you for your input. Actually, yes she is badly OOC and I understand that. I was going to explain that more in-depth in the following chapters, thought you've gotten the point - She is still very young. She grows out of it by the next chapter seeing as its over a thousand years. I'm sorry, but not everyone is all sweetness when faced with dark emotions - sometimes they bring out the worst in you.

2902588 Oh, and you're good at getting to people's emotions. I said that already, but you're good enough at it, it's worth saying again.

Also, my question about Discord still stands.

2904188 Thank you again! Actually Discord is going to play a pretty important part and I don't want to give it away But yes, after chapter one or two the story line deviates quite a bit from the original storyline.