Hello, fellow fanfictioneers!

I recently joined this group (15 minutes ago) and was wondering if anyone with absolutely nothing to do could read the story I just added. (14 minutes ago). I'd really like some feedback on what I can do to improve, and while I appreciate the discussions, none of it really tells me how to be a better writer. To that end, I ask that you read my story and be brutal as Trollestia with it. Nitpick at any and everything, please. And if you can't find anything wrong, let me know that too, so I know to keep doing what I'm doing.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/93907/my-little-warriors

And no, it has nothing to do with the Warrior cat series. I didn't even know that series existed until I named my story.