This is for chapter two of my fic Chain of Fate, I'll start us off.

Begining: Jane, Clare and Chrysalis escape through the castle while fighting off guards.

Middle: Celestia sends a letter to her student once she finds out about the jail break.
Battle with the main 6

End: A shade appears in front of them after the battle.
Epic battle with the shade.

Now what do you think should be added, or changed.

Looks like one hundred percent of your group members are going to participate, and I say it looks pretty nice as is, I look forward to seeing it. I've used the Mane Six in battles against my human OC before, and I think it's a good way to differentiate your story from others, giving people more incentive to read more of the story as it comes. I could be wrong, but it's not every day the protagonist has to fight our favorite ponies.

305789 The hardest part for me is keeping them in character and finding good ways to introduce them.

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How did it turn out?