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Review: Twilight’s Hero

Tags [Romance] 100%, [Comedy] 80%, and [slice of life] 100%

Summary: Shipping Thorax and Twilight fiction.

Detail analysis:  

The flow of it is a little bit cleaner than the last story I read from this author, the idea is still going to be the same for any shipping fictions and the grammar also still needs a little bit of work. If that's the story you want to keep writing, it's fine but the idea is always going to be a massive product in other writers.

The score of the idea is clearly a 7/10 due to lack of some stuff (shipping is nothing new.)

The flow is clearly a 7/10 do love the flow of this better but it still needs a tiny bit of work before it can go higher.

The grammar is clearly a 6/10 there isn’t much to say but it does need some polishing.

Dialog is near a 7/10 I do like the dialog in this.

Final score 

6.5/10