This thread is for those with alternate universe story's and are looking for feedback. Please only post to this thread if your story has the alternate universe tag. If your story does not I will take down your post.

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In the Shadow and the Light
Tags: Adventure, Alternate Universe
Sum Up: Inspired by Ray Feist's Riftwar Saga, Equestria is discovered by ponies from another world who control a mighty empire spanning the stars. But as Twilight learns more about these slave owning, light-obsessed, dark-hating soldier ponies, the more she starts to doubt the sincerity of thier pleas for friendship.
Notes: the story has just finished chapter 6, bringing the introductory arc to a close. I'd like some feedback on the pacing, the structure, and most importantly what people thought of the Empire and the Imperial OCs

Vengeance of Dawn
Tags: Adventure, Alternate Universe
Sum Up: Breaking Dawn was Princess Celestia's protege until Twilight Sparkle took her place. Now, as her hated rival becomes a princess, Dawn plots her revenge
Notes: 2 chapters up, general commentary requested.

Nox Arcana

Tragedy, Adventure, Alternate Universe.

Wanted and unwilling to fight the very ponies she once called friends, Luna is forced to run and hide like a common criminal. With no allies to run to or acquire help from, Luna must avoid the numerous patrols and the Elements of Harmony, all the while trying to find out what happened the night the sun failed to rise and what, or who, could have caused Celestia to never awaken from her sleep.

Title: A Journey Unthought Of: Revival of Chaos

Tags: Adventure, Alt. Universe

Link: A Journey Unthought Of: Revival of Chaos

Short sum up: This story is a sequel to A Journey Unthought Of. Every attempt is being made to make this story as open to new readers as possible.

In the months after the events of the first journey to Equestria, Adam and Lyra Heartstrings have enjoyed a life together on the outskirts of a rural Montana town. Back in Equestria, a Royal Canerlot Wedding has taken place, and the Changeling menace has been repulsed. As the weeks pass, the Royal Family is rocked by an unexpected death, and in the face of this and the Changeling scare, Equestria is tossed into a state of upheaval. Events that have been nearly fourteen hundred years in the making are now unfolding in concert, all under the guidance of some mysterious entity, who has been influencing countless individuals, who were in the right place at the right time. How will Adam, Lyra, Twilight Sparkle and her friends, Princesses Celestia and Luna, and all the others struggle through the potential outbreak of an Equestrian civil war?

additional notes: Any feedback at all is greatly appreciated, as I haven't received any constructive criticism at all.