I'm not looking for hardcore proofreading and editing, so much as some comments on what a reader liked and didn't like and why; and what did and didn't make sense to the reader.

My story is sci-fi comedy, and about 4700 words.

Please reply or PM! Thanks.

Hi.

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Hi? I guess I was hoping for a somewhat more specific reply.

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You don't check on your thread for a cool half year and you scold me for being Spartan? That's like a wife that feels totally justified to cheat because her husband's too boring. Go get bucked and I thank for dodging a bullet with you.