I would like more opinion on this story to see how I can improve it for the community. Please comment so that I can see where I can make this story more appealing to the group and community. If you haven't read the fic I would greatly appreciate it.

Welcome to the Properly Organized Rarijack Group, Silent Echos. Nice of you to join us. ^^

So far, from what I've read, you're doing well. You've got a nice build-up, a touch of foreshadowing, and your characters seem to be in character, even with sad Applejack being sad. From the context of your story, you do have it making sense for AJ to be really down.

My main complaint is that your chapters tend to end rather abruptly, but you wouldn't be the first fan of cliffhangers on this site.