I Am Deeply Sorry For the Long Waits · 12:15am May 11th, 2022
Greetings, my dear good readers.
I would like to let you all know that I am still working on the story I unsubmitted again, and I am finally making good progress with it after I managed to finally come up with a good theme to focus on that will not only give it a good message, but also help fix the mistakes from early on in the beginning.
I also wanted to say that I am very sorry that this is taking so long for me to finish. I've been dealing with school all year long, and it's gotten in the way of my time to write my stories. I also have been struggling with depression and it has been messing with my energy to brainstorm, and also my motivation to want to continue writing. I just got out of school for the summer, and I've been writing more than I have in the last few months.
Like I said before, I'll get this story done as soon as I can, and again, I'm sorry that this is taking so long.
writer's block is rough, and don't rush the story, having a good result is worth waiting for.
So, instead of reworking the finished chapters with my criticism in mind you simply started over? That's fine and I actually prefer that to be honest. I have been curious about the wait, but didn't want to bother you about something so minor. Glad to hear it.
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No, I didn't start over. I took your criticism to heart, and out of the blue I managed to think up a good theme for this story that will also help me fix the critiques from early on. I'm basically just reworking some parts that I think didn't work overall and will actually tie into the theme. To be honest, I felt like my first try with this story made the Mane 7 act out of character, and that whole poison ivy joke didn't work since Anon is meant to be painted as sympathetic. What I'm doing now is just finishing the rest of the chapters and then going back to the ones already finished and make sure the writing for them is aligned with everything else. I'm in the middle of another chapter that is pretty long, but I should be done with it soon and hopefully the rest of the chapters will be much shorter if I can be able to make them shorter.
If you wanted to know what the theme for this story will be, it will be about guilt.
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To tell you the truth the original version did surprise me. From the summary alone I figured anon would be more of a doormat like he kind of was in the first story and only play nice with Zephyr and all of his suffering being self-inflicted and with Rainbow pushing him to. Never did I thought he would actually be assertive against Zephyr, especially to the point of going too far which seems in conflict with the main premise. Or it would if Zephyr wasn't a complete moron about it. Curious to see how the new version is, though well done aspect of the original was it surprising me, even if the surprise wasn't an ideal one.
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I'll give you a sneak peak if you'd like to see it: I'm keeping in the part of the first chapter where Anon does that fishing rod pantsing thing to Zephyr Breeze. And instead of continuing to antagonize him like he did in the original version with that poison ivy prank, I will have Anon feel very bad about what he did and the Mane 7 with the exception of Rainbow Dash, and probably Pinkie if I can make that work, will show disapproval of that stunt he pulled instead of viewing it as hilarious karma. And at the beginning of the story instead of being all about using punishment to teach Zephyr Breeze a lesson, it will be about Anon trying to be a good role model for him to help him improve himself and possibly even manage to convince him that Rainbow Dash is not into him. The only real spoiler I can give about the ending that's already pretty obvious to tell given my direction is that Rainbow Dash and Zephyr Breeze won't be getting together, not even in any upcoming sequels.
And also, the reason why I'm keeping in Anon pansting Zephyr Breeze is because I want to give Anon a serious character flaw that is not only part of what defines him as a character, but will also play a role into his backstory as to what caused his mental health to go down the drain up until he met the Mane 7. You'll find out about that flaw once I finally managed to get this story finished. I mentioned before that I had plans to make these stories into a series, and I need to have this story finished first so that things about Anon's character and backstory will be established and I can then explore more in the upcoming prequel to the Truth or Dare story.
I think I might also need to change the summary too so that it won't look misleading.
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By the way, thanks again for your feedback. I was puzzled as to why this story didn't seem like it was getting a good reception, but now I get it and I want to fix mistakes that I have now begin to notice.
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I'm not gonna lie, thinking back to the original makes me realize just how childish and out of character I made it look. Luckily, I won't be doing that with this new version. And by the way, I am now finished with that long chapter and the next couple should be much shorter I think.