The reason of the rewrite of The Ghost of Cozy Glow

The main reason why I wanted to do a rewrite on The Ghost of Cozy Glow the 1st story in the series is because I wrote the original version when I was in a bad place in my life and now I'm that I'm in a better place I think a rewrite is warranted.

True there was some character development but the original story didn't have as much character development. I also wanted to explore more of that instead of just bringing in a character in the story and with not a much of a reason for them being there.

I also wanted to make it clear who the bad guys were and who the good guys were. In the original one Mr. Harmony was a good guy but when he brought Betty back to Equestria with his tracking team it wasn't really clear that he was a good guy because #1 he had Betty fight his tracking team on a bet the she couldn't take them. #2 When he did bring Betty back he did electric shock therapy on her for no good reason other than just because he could. To me in the rewrite, it's clear that he is a good guy because he doesn't do that to her.

With the mother in the first chapter of the rewrite and the original one at first it didn't look like she was a bad guy. In the original version of the story the mother looks like a good guy by trying to show she cares about Betty. In chapter 8 of the original story Betty's mom walks into her hospital room and declares that she had a plan to kill her. Also in chapter 6 she sees Betty in a hospital room and starts to shout at her for no reason other than she's angry with her. The first chapter of the rewrite it looks like Betty's mom is concerned about her but after Betty does the suicide attempt it starts show how her mom really is. But Betty's mom doesn't say to her that she has a plan to kill her until much later in the rewrite.

In original one to me it's not really made clear that Cozy Glow is actually a good guy. Because even though she worried about Betty going to jail for smashing her statue in chapter 10 of the original story she goes and wipes Betty's memory. Cozy Glow doesn't do that in the rewrite. The fact that she gets excited about someone that's still alive can see her clearly shows that she is one of the good guys. Also she shows that she no longer wants to finish the war that she declared on Equestria.

Betty still smashes Cozy Glow's statue in a fit of rage and that's what happened in the original one as well. I kept that scenario because I wanted to stay as true to the original stories first chapter as much as possible. It was the same thing with Betty's suicide attempt.

I also wanted to explore more of Betty's personality as well. She is quick to anger (sometimes not all the time) because she's annoyed with people. So she sits on her tail to show it. That's when people try to back off and give her some space. Keyword is 'try' on that scenario. Of course at the moment in the story she doesn't really have much to be angry about after the first chapter. The first chapter her anger was more than just anger it was pure rage. And when a person is that angry they can do things that aren't rational.

I thought it would be interesting for me to have a dark tone with Betty overcoming obstacles one by one as the story goes along. Like her taking care of her bully Marble in school. She was not able to do that in the original one. Actually the Headmare Starlight Glimmer thought it would be best that she and Marble go on a date to settle their differences. That happened in the original story. In the rewrite Betty is able to take care of her bully Marble by winning a race against him.

I wanted to explore the relationship between Betty and Dae a little more than what I did with the original story. As the story in the rewrite goes along, there's more of showing Dae and Betty's relationship instead of just bringing him in the story and then suddenly they're together in chapter 16.

So those are some reasons why I wanted to do a rewrite of the 1st The Ghost of Cozy Glow. And I like what I've done so far. As I have said in my previous posts I'm not changing my story because people get triggered by it or because they're mad and want to stay it's crap. From the way I see it if people are at least giving the story a try and adding it to their bookshelves that's great. What matters most is that I like my story and I need to stop second guessing myself because people are mad and/or triggered by it.

Oh and another thing, the rewrite isn't as dialogue heavy as the original one was. The original one was super dialogue heavy with little to no narration to it. I realized that when I went over the original one.