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Nov
9th
2020
I'm upset. · 4:54am Nov 9th, 2020
This may be the last blog post I do this year. I feel like giving up on... checking every hour for a comment on my shitty fic, I want to improve and feel better about my writing. To be fair this is my first story on here and I'm being ungrateful, impatient, and... it's not your fault- I'm just new to this. Obviously. Oh I'm such an emotional wreck right now
please excuse me. Have a nice day, see you next year 👍
(I'm still reviewing fics but other than that- I'm pretty much staying quiet on the site)
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PacifistDoodl3r · 132 views
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I'm not planning on reading the fic itself entirely, because I don't care to read non-con, but that being the case, would you enjoy receiving some advice anyway, on your long description and other things to do with posting fic on this site?
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Sure thing
I'd appriciate the help! /)
Okay.
This turned out pretty long. I hope this turns out to be helpful.
I'll be discussing your current work, but it's probably gotten most of the views it's going to get, so the idea is to apply this to your next work.
I know how it feels not to get comments. My story here got comments, but on Ao3 I have some stories, both short and long, with no comments. Sometimes it has to do partly with how popular the subject matter is. My point is, there are no guarantees, you can only do your best. Write what you want to read, and make it the best you can, because you are your only guaranteed reader.
As noted, I personally didn't read the full story, because I don't care to read noncon. It's good that you tagged it accurately, because you want to attract readers who are likely to enjoy the content of your story. That goal is basically the key to knowing how to make a story description.
Your story has been on and off the site a couple of times today so I'm not able to check my facts last thing before posting. I did read a little, and the prose wasn't terrible or offputting at the beginning, so I would expect to see more engagement. You had 175 views and not enough up or down votes to show any to the reader, so less than 10. Fimfic has unusually high levels of reader engagement; with 175 views on this site I would expect to see at least about 12 votes either up or down. This suggests to me that the long description was putting people off from even reading far enough to make a decision and leave a vote.
Your current long description is useful and fine at first, but then turns too chatty and doesn't really tell the reader enough to let them know whether or not they want to read your story. (This is very common on this site.) Since the beginning of your description is fine, you could do something more like this: "The Great and Powerful Trixie has a wonderful idea! Does that portal to the human world still work?" Then add a little more about the plot--does she bring someone through against their will? Only use about two short sentences. Your description didn't say who was perpetrating the Noncon and who was the victim. This is important for a potential reader to know before they start reading. Make sure you specify a little more about the clop.
It's better not to be coy with your trigger warnings. You can just say "TW: contains vore" and leave out the sillier stuff. Let the readers know what they need to know.
For your next story, be sure to proofread your title. For instance, this one should have been, "Trixie: Insert a Title!" However, do give your next story a descriptive title. For instance, although this story can't be reposted as such, if you'd had a different, more descriptive title for it, it might have been, "Trixie's Mirror Portal Mischief" or anything else that you feel explains a little about the story in a brief, concise manner. And even though you see it everywhere nowadays, it is still incorrect to format a title as if it were a sentence. Capitalize the relevant words. :)
You cover art lacked contrast, so it was hard to see what it was a picture of. It's obviously a hand-drawn picture of Trixie, but I'm saying you couldn't see that instantly. There's nothing wrong with using your own work as a cover art, but in this case it probably wasn't your most effective possible choice. A screencap of Trixie from the show, and/or other characters in your story, with an appropriate facial expression related to what your story is about, would've been a solid choice. Or, you could try editing your own art for more contrast.
There's another issue with the feedback, and it has to do with something that you said in one of your blogs. I see that you asked in your blog posts for feedback and said that you want to improve your craft. You said you would work to improve your craft. Then when you released the story, you said that you had rushed it. Rushing a story doesn't illustrate a desire to improve your craft. I can understand the temptation, and certainly you want the story to be out there where people can read it. But perfecting your craft and rushing to publication are opposing behaviors. If you want people to give you serious feedback, you must respect your own work first, and demonstrate a desire to improve by taking your time before posting. This doesn't necessarily mean you'll get feedback, but sending contradictory messages about how seriously you take your own work is counterproductive and won't achieve the hoped-for outcome. Instead, try for steady production of your best work.
Writing often isn't really a good way to socialize. It's a lot of lonely work before you get feedback. If you really want to just talk to people on Fimfiction, commenting on others' stories, which I understand you are already doing, is the most immediately fruitful way to socialize. If you really want to craft a good story, Fimfiction can be a great place to do it. Be your own editor, first, before you ask somebody else for feedback. Write the rough draft, which you can rush as much as you want, then set it aside for three days and work on something else. Then read your first draft over and take your time on grammatical and structural improvements. There are many writers' groups on this site that have threads about how to do that.
Good luck and happy writing!
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Thank you. I'm taking a huge break before I even think about writing my next story on here- TIAT is laughably terrible and my next fic will be an apology letter of sorts for the people who were disappointed. I aim to improve and I appriciate your feedback. Hopefully next year will be far better than this one, thanks for the support
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I hope you have a relaxing and inspiring break and happy holidays!
5395253
Feech, It has been a while, but I'm back- obviously lol. But the time in between your amazing comment and my return; I've uploaded 4 stories (not on FimFic) and they were well received. This boosted my confidence to come back here and I've worked on a story that seems to gain positive feedback. Again, thank you for your help.
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Really glad to hear it, thanks for the update! Your progress is your own; I'm glad my comment helped, but there are tons of people who think they want help and then when people tell them what to do, they don't do the work it takes to get where they want to be. So good job. Your success is due to your taking the feedback seriously.