First One!

Hey everybody! BoldBlue here with my first blog post ever in the history of time! (Hooray!) So I figure since I don't have much to write about so far I'd just like to take a moment of my day to ask what the readers of both of my stories think of them so far? How do you think the plot is going, and do you like it? It'd really be appreciated if you could give me any thoughts and critiques you might have! So here's to many more chapters and blog posts a-plenty!

~BoldBlue

Comments

[Flamesinger599]

Well, first of all...

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Second: The Good. You have some great ideas! And you're writing them well. Each chapter is interesting and has funny ideas, and while I wish Shingo was a little more witty in his comments, it's hasn't kept me from reading. Good job, and you should definitely continue.

Third: Criticism. A couple of things you want to look out for in a story like this is not making it too over-the-top. Like some of the Crusader adventures. The bear wrestling in particular stretched some boundaries. While it seems like a perfectly reasonable thing for the CMC to do, that doesn't necessarily mean a good read.

So yeah, two things: Try not to make Shingo sound like a five-year-old, and tone down the craziness level a bit Not a ton though.

Other than that, write on! Me wants more Shcootaloos!!!