PonyChan

A nice fella from PonyChan went through my WIP story here. He pointed out a lot of things which I've been slowly chopping away at as well as some others which I had completely missed and thanks a lot for it!
One of the things he stressed was the pacing (I assume he's never read At The Mountains Of Madness. 20 pages explaining rock formations.) of the story. Yeah it is a little slow with a few mundane things here and there that have/will be trimmed in the future.
I have zero interest to ever submit this to EqD since I don't think Lovecraftian Pony stories are something widely sought after. Seeing as this is a work in progress I will definitly take some of his suggestions.