I Need Some Feedback. · 11:36pm Feb 21st, 2018
In my last chapter of The Tides Of Fate, do you think I was too quick in having Ryuji deny Celestia's feelings at the moment it happened? I know I wrote out that keyword 'yet'. But do you think I should have brought the two of them together then? After all, Tia and him have one thing in common. Over a thousand years in life and experience. But Ryuji lived it all through his frame as he slept, thinking he was actually the frame itself. A war machine and not an actual living being before he awoke. While Tia lived all those years as herself. I am just wondering to myself if that would cause issues down the road. I mean, They will get together, that is how I am writing it. But then I think about Ryuji's perspective. Perhaps I am just too involved with my characters I create for my stories.
Your feedback is welcomed.
I think give them some time to fully develop their relationship. They will end up together, just not at the next chapter. Perhaps the chapter after that when their obvious attraction towards each other fully blossoms into love.
But its your story man, you can do whatever you want with it.
P.S. can't wait for more stories from you considering that you're one of my favorites! Also, are you planning to make Pinkie into a romantic lead in a story in the future? Just curious.
You make it sound like she wouldn't understand. After all you did say they did have the years. But just like our hero she to hides behind something and that is her motherly persona and smiling mask. I personally don't think his decision was wrong and his self discovery is just. And I mean he'll that doesn't mean that she can stop trying right?
I would have to agree with Hippogriff Magister to let it develop a bit more before getting them together.
I say let it develop over time and let their story progress over time no sense in making it too quick.