Work In Progress (A Snippet)

Art is by Tjpones

I'm honestly very happy how well The Harmony Initiative has been doing so far, in terms of feedback and people actually wanting to get involved. Seriously! Over the past couple of weeks, there's been quite a bit in the way of OCs and trying to get them to fit into the story. It's a bit overwhelming, but I'm managing and doing my best with each chapter.

Which brings me to the purpose of this post.

The next chapter is looking to be long. I'm trying to keep it below the 18,000 word mark, but we're getting up there! Hopefully everyone will think the end result is good . There's a lot that I'm working on in the chapter and it's got a little ways to go before its done and it'll be a little while before everything's revised and edited (I'll probably be getting an editor and a pre-reader or two), so it may be about another week before the chapter is completely done. I figure, the more I work on the story's chapters, the better the quality, at least those are my hopes.

I kinda don't want to leave everyone hanging, so I decided to post a small snippet of what the chapter has in store. Far from perfect at the moment, and no doubt I'll be making changes in one spot or another, but here you go:

“Commander!” Vapour shouted. “We’ve got a visual!”

The craft sped away, flying at speeds Air Strike would have thought impossible.

“Air Strike!” Vapour called, her voice right inside Air Strike’s ear. “Don’t lose that thing!”

It was big. Air Strike didn’t know what she expected. The flying disc cut through the air with such fervor and agility, she had begun to doubt that there was anything living inside. The iridescent exterior caught glints of the sun, flashing into Air Stike’s eyes. Blue Bell fell behind, followed by Vapor Trail, whose eyes followed Air Strike’s astonishingly lightning fast pace. Lightning Dust zipped by, trying to match pace with Air Strike’s mechanical marvels, but ultimately fell behind with the rest.

Air Strike furrowed her brow, willing her wings to increase speed, while keeping an eye on their monitors. She was bordering the crimson line, verging on an energy overload. Even at the breakneck speeds, plowing through clouds and struggling to keep herself on course, the alien ship soared faster with relative ease.

Vanhoover’s cityscape glittered far below as the sun began to touch the horizon. Air Strike began to wonder just how many ponies were watching the desperate chase and what might have become of them if the alien ship were to crash in the city.

Out of the city, out of the city. The words repeated themselves in her head as she trained her eyes back on the alien craft. There was something wrong. A distortion formed around the back face of the craft, the surrounding clouds pulled closer together as it began to slow and a glow of green manifested.

BWOMP!

“MOVE IT!”

Air Strike’s heart jumped in her throat, her eyes and head following the path of the volatile ball of emerald electricity. It sailed past her and the rest of The Banshees before expanding sizably and rapidly. Air Strike’s mechanical wings propelled her forward absent mindedly as she kept her sights on the rest of her squad. The pegasi scrambled in panic as the outer rim of the explosion seared their tails and shocked their armor. The sped up as much as they could, matching Air Strike’s slower pace.

“Banshees!” Vapour roared through the radio. “Open fire!”

Comments

[Solemn Vigil]

18k words? Dayum. You're really going at it.

And the preview really has me hyped.

ALL ABOARD THE HYPE TRAIN!
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[Madame Hellspawn]

4435646 Yeah, there's a lot of ground to cover, but I'm determined !

[Damien Martino]

Insert what's his name here YES! YES!

[Solemn Vigil]

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[Solemn Vigil]

Air Strike’s heart jumped in her throat, her eyes and head following the path of the volatile ball of emerald electricity. It sailed past her and the rest of The Banshees before expanding sizably and rapidly. Air Strike’s mechanical wings propelled her forward absent mindedly as she kept her sights on the rest of her squad. The pegasi scrambled in panic as the outer rim of the explosion seared their tails and shocked their armor. The sped up as much as they could, matching Air Strike’s slower pace.

vastly*
absentmindedly*
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