Oct
23rd
2016
dribbles · 9:08pm Oct 23rd, 2016
Party balloons and streamers galore,
maybe we could use some more
While i hide behind a smile of stained glass,
I spread cheer to the masses.
Though others smile in glee,
the parties i throw mean nothing to me,
Every day the number of smiles go up,
and i just want my turn to be up.
my friends i feel lost without,
i think my heart would give out.
thoughts anyone?
starting over not mine, but it was removed from the site by owner.
Not bad.
inspired by this persons works. he has 3 that i liked. temporal
4268287 have you read this one? its very short. dashie
not sure if it's seen on my page or not. (runescape1) <--
4268503
I'll check it out.
4268503
Why you gotta makes me sad!?
I like the idea, and how subtle you are in the whole thing. Aside from a few capitalization parts you missed, I enjoyed it. You could make an entire story out of that.
4268618 lol... thanks. spur of the moment is apparently my thing. and i missed some errors? dang... i went thru it a couple hours ago too =/
i wouldn't mind making it longer. if i do have a continuation, i'll likely make it a sequel to this. let me know if you have any thoughts xD i would have to label it alt universe clearly.
4268626
I will if you want, just Pm me when you wanna do so. The errors are nothing big, just capitalization. With i and the first word of certain sentences being lower case. They stuck out. I look forward to it!
4268631 thanks! i will need to expand on this tho, i want it to be 1k words before i submit it.
Oh no, Pinkie's depressed again?
4286496 i know i know, its used a lot as the premise. but it was a thought i had to write. inspired by the idea that- making others happy was a way to hide, and make her own sadness less noticeable.