The story.

Yeah, I know, I know, you read it, and you essentially read shit. I have gone back and literally rewrote the whole damn thing, I took a few chapters down to blend it in with the rewrite so that's why you'll see chapters gone. I've realized there was zero detail in the story, so I have gone back to add detail, and chapter two seems a little rushed because it was, simply due to the fact I wrote it in between being awake and asleep. I thank, HopeForTheFew, for telling me to essentially re write it, it's a boat with holes in it. So, if you read it and thought 'This is shit.' Then I apologize for wasting your time, but I do request you reading it one more time, so far the only complaint I got was just a few grammar mistakes but other than that the main flow of the story is good.

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[HopeForTheFew]

I'll check it out again for you mate, should have my opinion in a couple hours, or maybe tomorrow, just got back from a hard, hard hike and I'm dead tired right now.