Chapter 23 of Doctor and Ditzy's Science Theater is done! · 9:39am Feb 29th, 2016
Hello everyone. I wanted this to come out by Valentine's Day, but work kinda messed that up. I kept getting called in to work for one reason or another. February was such a miserable month for me. Oh well. Today we will be reading chapters 9-12 of Longest Night, Longest Day by RainbowDoubleDash. The story is finally picking up! ...Sorta. Thinking about the pacing of this fic, I totally think you could cut four chapters out of it no problem. About half of the festival preparations could be cut. They don’t really mean much(And it would cut out the needless slandering of the Mane 6) and it didn’t really lead anywhere. I know the point of it is was to show that Trixie was freaking out over nothing, but if that was the case...why drag it out so long? I really wish this story had the brisk pace the MLP pilot had. And I really don't get why we have a chapter now about the Luna 6's backstories. It really doesn't fit in with this part of the story, and I think it would be better to have it in an entire different sequel story. That way more time could be dedicated to it.
Anyway, on with the riff.
Special thanks to RainbowDoubleDash for letting me do his story. You are awesome!
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