Something isn't beautiful because it lasts.
What? You thought I wasn't going to do this again?
Ch 2, for your editing/pre-reading pleasure lol.
As always, feel free to point out any errors or let me know any issues.
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THANK YOU.
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Great!
Saw a few typos.....will add my comments when I get home and I'm not on a cell phone. Plot wise.....great chapter. Flows pretty nice.
3741767 add it to the doc. It's on suggestions so I'll get notified as soon as you do it.
Change to “Twilight, you know you can discuss anything with me.”
3741775 cool
I think I covered the majority of the punctuation and grammar issues, and left a few comments on other editing you might want to do.
It's shaping up to be another interesting story!
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I saw, thanks!
That first section might take a bit of work to correct... I actually had the same though I just wasn't sure what to do about it.
3742905 No problem. If you want me to look at future chapters, feel free to share docs with that email. (I can't guarantee speedy response but at least the notification wouldn't get lost in the flood of group additions, uninteresting blogs, and other stuff that tends to fill up my feed here.)
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