Me Shit Talking My Own Story

Before you read this, I am going to be talking about the story so if you haven't read it and you want to, THIS IS A SPOILER WARNING!!!

Also very strong language in this rant.

So, I'm just gonna shit talk my story, and if you liked it (If you liked it I'm assuming your messing with me), don't read this, or do, I couldn't care less.

First of all, the story in general is all over the place and half the time it doesn't even make any sense.

Example:

“Did anything happen last night?” Twilight said.
“No… not that I know of. Why?” I said, Twilight just kept quiet until we got home.
Wonder what’s up with her, and, did something happen?

Ok, from what I gathered, this story is supposedly about a depressed human coming to Equestria or Ponyvillie, because that's all we know, it says he's been other places, but there is no evidence except when Celestia says this,

“They don’t know who you are, you where seen as a threat when you first came to Canterlot, we did not know what or who you were.” Celestia said.

And that's it, and the only thing I can go off is this! Complete bullshit.

Secondly, I was reading the comments, and I read something that surprised me, the beginning is about the main character falling into a portal, a fucking portal, did the writer just pull that from out of his ass, because it seems like it, but maybe he didn't know? Nah scratch that (see what I did there? hehe), I think he knew what he was doing.

Lastly, the story is just a pile of cow shit, in what world would, Rainbow Dash beat the hell out of the main character, Fluttershy want to kill a baby changeling, Twilight cutting, Shining Armour beating the shit out of the main character too for caring for his sister, and the MAIN CHARACTER'S NAME IS FUCKING MOONY, THE AUTHOR'S NAME!!!

So I just have four words for the author of this train wreak of a story...

Fuck you, Moony Scratch.