Contest project, day twenty one: [poot title here] · 2:25am Feb 22nd, 2015
Okay, drama's over, sh*t happens, douches exist and it happens that I have a nice lot of wonderful friends. End of the story. Let's get to work. MUSIC!
First of all, these are the last seven days of time I have, so I'll ask for all of you, specially who directly agreed to help (I'm looking at you TS Apprentice, Showstopper and DDust), to be medieval on your critics an corrections. If something works, good. If it doesn't tell me and let's see what can be fixed.
New villain
Killer Croc is out. Mostly because, even if a crocodile's skin is tough, it's not bulletproof, which is the point of the one-shot in the first place. So, who's the replacement? This guy:
Red Panzer
Now, here's a list of reasons of why I'm using him instead of good old Waylon:
Trixie as Deadshot, Sonata used to be Killer Moth, Black Mask is the main antagonist. Too many Gothams, so let's cut down one.
Panzer has a techno-armor (nazi Iron Man), which would explain how did Black Mask got a squadron of Rocket Reds as his security guards.
In fact, with only Red Panzer I got more than enough to make the "it's impossible".
He's a nazi villain, the ultimate Acceptable Target, literally. No matter what you do to them you don't feel bad. Even the Blues Brothers hates them.
It show off how evil is Black Mas by proxy. If Black Mask is willing to work with a nazi, he HAS to be evil.
I like the headcanon of Trixie being a Romani/Roani, so RP could be Trixie's first emotional kill.
This also makes him a counterweight for Sonata; both are the only ponies to trigger an emotional response on Trixie, but in oposite direction:
Sonata/Love - Panzer/Hate.
Now, more than one will say "But Wave, nobody knows him, how dangerous could be a D-List like Red Panzer?"
Well, here's the hero he confronts on daily basis:
Still thinking he's a pushover?
Here's today progress, enjoy and let's discuss what works and what doesn't (srsly, I'm running out of time).
Deadshot #1: (Not) Bulletproof
password: boom_headshot
Waiting...
This is definitely interesting. You're setting up the plot well, the character interpretation is entertaining, and I'm definitely interested to see how things are going to turn out. No major complaints as far as story-telling goes, though I would highly suggest that you get an editor to help with spelling and grammar.
Plot: 8.8
Characters: 9.5
Spelling/Grammar: 5.0