Contest project, day sixteen: Taking the job, more screen time for sonata and a new tag for the story. · 2:11am Feb 17th, 2015
Today's progress has been a little slow. Just one scene of Sonata arranging Trixie's next hit (Black Mask) with Trixie surveying her. The scene in question serves to show how does Sonata fits in with the setting as also give a little exposition on what kind of world they're in. Here:
Deadshot #1: (Not) Bulletproof
Password: boom_headshot
Another change to the formatting is the comic book style (name and credits). This is mostly because it's one of my signature styles, so I wanted to include it for my first contest.
The other chage is a new tag I'm adding. It's one of the most controversial tags I've seen in this site, but I think it has its justification. So, from now on, this story has the following tags: Crossover, Adventure, Alternate Universe and Anthro.
Okay, I'll justify it. The thing is, that guns are a part of this fic. A big part. Gestures as putting a finger over the trigger of manipulate a gun are part of the narrative. Actions that could never happen with hooves.
The other reason is the use of clothes. If you read Prologue: Secret Origins I give more thought to the Deadshot costume, pointing out that it's supposed to pass unnoticed in public. This is only possible if ponies use clothes on daily basis, which is more easy to accept if they're anthros.
So, there it is. As always I'll appreciate any feedback you can give me. See ya.
So since this is a Deadshot story, will it also have gore? Just wondering. Anywho, oh yes the ever infamous "anthro". As long as the story is good I don't mind. Heck it could even have romance and I'd still read it. The comic book style is a very unique approach too. Good luck...again.
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Hmm, good point. I haven't showed blood yet (not counting Trixie's overuse of the word bloody) but yeah, there will be bullet wounds and there will be deaths on screen, which mean that, at least, this needs the dark tag.
Thanks for the heads up.
BTW, how're you going?
2803424 Fine...just fine
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Can I help?
2803436 This is tough. I don't people to think I'm a writer who can't think up ideas on his own. But then again, I could really use the help...sure why not. Ugh! I feel like Applejack.
2803436 The password is thisisthepartwhereikillyou
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Dude, you're talking to someone who post a daily blog asking for help and feedback. I'll leave that there.
Well, tell me, for what I'm good?
2803451 Your dialogue is top notch. Really, it's spectacular. You also have very high quality in terms of action scenes. That's where I need help. Action scenes are things i can never get around. That's where you come in.
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You're good too, you have a very good grasp on concepts and major plot ideas.
But I think we have a translation mistake here. I was asking on what I could help you more specifically.
2803464 That's just it, transition. How can I make a fight with an Ursa Major work? I am very bad at when things are in motion. In your work a lot of it is motion and it is spectacular. Me, not so much. I only got so far in the Smash Bros fic because it was already scripted.
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Okay, why don't you give me the night to think about it and I'll PM you any idea I can come up with.
2803480 Thanks
...wow. Finally, someone starts to make a good anthro fic that isn't clop! Hands and clothes, good reasons for going anthro. Once again, I look forward to seeing how this progresses.
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You know, now you said hands I'm feeling like putting Lyra in the middle of this, just for the sake of it.