Chapter 1 Comments

arancaytar

#6 • 1d, 8h ago • • •
>> Distorted Flare
As the story makes clear, this is way before Luna turned evil. It's even foreshadowed by Celestia's memory of Luna being distant and unwilling to talk to her, hinting at her growing bitterness.
Snowy

#5 • 3d, 21h ago • 7 • •
>> Distorted Flare
Why should she have a special reaction to seeing her sister? The description says that this is a Celestia from before Nightmare Moon.
Kytin

#4 • 3d, 23h ago • • 2 •
Distorted Flare was kind of harsh but they made good points.
Distorted Flare

#3 • 4d, 6h ago • 2 • 14 • arancaytar Snowy
That was awful. I was anticipating the reaction to her sister being back and the horror and shock and you managed to cock it up, well done. I was honestly looking forward to this story the idea of Celestia being panicked then delighted to see her sister, emotions like crying maybe even collapsing in shock. Then devoting a couple chapters to Celestia in denial or even running away. Then slowly coming to terms with the news that everything she knows and has known is gone save for her sister. And yet you pretty much fucked it up. She is so fucking bland and shit.
There is no emotion other than "oh noes I has forgotten" The story was so fucking bland. the characters were terrible and really it was to short for a chapter.
bcsnakeeyes

#2 • 5d, 3h ago • • •
interesting, lets see what happens in the next chapter.
Anon42

#1 • 5d, 16h ago • 3 • •
Well, this is interesting. I think I have only seen one or two other stories with an amnesiac Celestia and neither of them used this particular premise.
Something new! You have my attention.