A dedication to nitpicking (Short) - The rebirth of the abyss lord Oblivion

This story is LONG.
And it doesn't look good.
Not gonna spend time on it.
But, doesn't mean I can't rip the description apart.

Original story is here; http://www.fimfiction.net/story/206632/the-rebirth-of-the-abyss-lord-oblivion

Uh-uh-uhmmmm...

Lets just begin.
And end.
With the description

It all started when the abyss lord awakened now equestria shall suffer from his wrath! its now up to necrosis and the mane six to defeat Oblivion and save the world! will they succeed or fail? read on to find out!!!

It all started when the Abyss Lord awakened. Now Equestria shall suffer from his wrath! Its up to Necrosis and the Mane Six to defeat Oblivion and save the world. Will they succeed or fail?

Alright, now that the corrections out of the way...
-whistle-
I'm already not interested in reading.

Main chaticters
Oblivion the abyss lord- class Bezerker, swordmaster, and arch mage
Necrosis- class palidin, mage and swordmaster

Main Characters -
Oblivion the Abyss Lord - Berserker, Swordmaster, Archmage
Necrosis - Paladin, Mage, Swordmaster

Okay, in the top part of this YOU SAID:

Its up to Necrosis and the Mane Six

What, are Twilight and her friends suddenly not important?

Also, this is pretty worthless, on its own rights.

This is marked in the GORE category for heavy blood and guts along with extremely graphic scenes

This Fanfiction is rated MATURE for swearing excessive gore and sexual reference

If this was made into a movie it would be rated R

This is marked in the gore category for heavy blood and guts, along with extremely detailed scenes.

This fanfic is rated mature for excessive swearing and sexual reference

That last part isn't needed.
Also, I think if there's sexual references in the text it should be rated sex.
Oh and that last part is silly. Because nobody would watch.

This is marked ulternite universe because the story jumps between the Abyss and Equestria
I also use reference humor ya know if your a guy who loves horror and gore along with demon etc YOU'LL LOVE THIS!
Warning this story contains mass amounts of gore and mild swearing you have been warned

This is marked alternate universe because the story switches to the Abyss and Equestria.
I also use humor often, if you like humor, gore and demons you will like this.

Okay, we get it. Tags tags and TAGS. PRETTY SURE WE READ ALTERNATE UNIVERSE AND THE TITLE AND FOUND OUT THIS WAS A CROSSOVER FIC.

Sorry, but....just saying.
Laughter, demons and horror.
Yeah, uhm, should I be glad this isn't marked comedy? Well, no. Because as far as I see it, this whole story is a comedy.
...you stated like 5 times already that this story is chock-filled with gore. There's a tag, too.

That is all.