Apr
10th
2014
Words are Power · 12:36am Apr 10th, 2014
Enchant me with your words.
I hate euphemisms for body parts is clopfics. That is not enchanting. That is disturbing, childish, annoying.
The Over use of "very".... Please be more specific. Instead of "very sad", how about, "despondent"?
Use colorful words! Describe the raw pain tearing a hole in your soul, or the tinkling laughter dancing through the air.
Description is everything. Word choice is life.
Emotions are not described by simple words. "Mad" does not tell me anything. Try something like "my soul was shattered, broken."
Prose is better that second grade sentences.
Words are power. Chose your words well. You have the power to make one cry, laugh, and hurt. But, chose poorly, and readers will roll their eyes.
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Sweet Berry · 190 views
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hmmm I can agree to that...I really can
True
Bit of repetition with two descriptions with something happening to a soul.