Little info and a call for help

Well hello there everyone. As I said in my story Secrecy vs Curiosity if the story did well I would put more effort into working on the entire story. As promised here it is with the very first chapter completed. I have a few other things I have to say though, not just a terrible announcement. I'm sort of calling for help here but is anyone willing to help me as a proof reader? All the chapters I have uploaded have been self proofed and there would always be a few mistakes that I missed that leave me dumbfounded If anyone would be so kind as to lend me a hand it would be much appreciated.

Also just a little extra information on Waning Sunset. I'm going to add another chapter that adds a lot more to what happened in Celestia's bedroom and make it a full length conversation that I feel it needed. It was what I originally planned on doing but it was the last day of the competition and I had an essay due the next day that I had barely started so time was not on my side.

Be silent, virtuous and ambitious.
~SS