(though please know it's a war of grammar mistakes in it)please read A NEW SHADOW · 6:41pm Mar 23rd, 2014
since im having trouble and writers block writing a 20,000 word chapter i have decided to write smaller chapters from now on instead of stressing myself to write big ones. im also worried you may not like it so soon i will be uploading the first chapter, though it will be only 1000 words to see if you like where the story is heading.
my ideas
so the idea is that sombra and twilight will slowly be reavealing there pasts to each other as they try to get out the prison trough the many puzzels they have to complete to be free of the prison.then fall in love yadda,yadda,yadda and escape.
please put in some of your ideas and opinons below on this
p.s i have not got a editor yet because im a bit shy!
so please critisize the next chapter like your a dinosaur
Meh, If making 1k chapters is more comfortable for you and makes you update often then I see no reason to have problems with it.
I would not suggest falling in love after the escape thought. Make them slowly understand one another,conquer the initial mistrust they have with the other.
Twilight might be willing to work with Sombra if there is no other choice but she will not magically trust or even want to free him in the beginning unless she can't escape without him.
And Sombra would be nice if he was not made totally sappy.
As they progress through the maze and one way or another learn more about the other as well as slowly lets say Twilight see's that while Sombra isn't a good pony, he has some redeeming qualities. Sombra's backstory while negative, doesn't make him evil. He is simply an anti thesis of Celestia. A dark ruler who went the way of the fear rather then love. Both choices have cons and pros. Celestia might be loved by all and tries to ensure peace and to keep her ponies happy but she does so at the cost of the strength of her nation. Sombra seems to have gone the other path. Prosperity and empowerment of the Crystal Empire at the cost of the happiness of his subjects.
And at the same time Twilight worms her way into Sombras heart as he sees her as more then another goody two shoes.
Maybe also organize some squabbles along the way for their conflicting personalities. Heck maybe the fight in the end of the maze with lasting consequences.
... Maybe I should not have written this small wall of text. Sorry if I wrote stuff you already thought trough.
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No,no all worth it some ideas I didn't think of thanks!