SPOILERS Review to the Story: "My Littlest Pet Shop: Escape from Equestria" by Drizzle Quill

Finally after months of just goofing around and working on other things, I’ve finally finished with this story up to the point of where Drizzle has yet to update. So I’m going to just make the review for up to this point because I’ve yet to get an answer to if she’ll be updating or not...So, on with what you’ve came here to read.

Personally, I have little to no knowledge of Littlest Pet Shop, but I had hoped that I could see if this story could show some things about it. It does and it doesn’t at the same time. What Drizzle does very well is the personalities of the pets themselves, as I can imagine each of them and of the reactions and ways of dealing with problems.

But a huge problem I saw from the very beginning through the first half of the story was the plot focusing around Blythe, the helper or owner of the pet shop, I think (sorry if I’m wrong). How could this be a problem, you may ask? From what I’ve seen, she’s not exactly the most impressive character and needs the antics and the personalities of the pets to really balance her out. But the pets weren’t really brought up at all at that initial point, so all we had was Blythe and the ponies. It’s that nothing really happens and all we get is talking with little information coming our way.

Another thing that Drizzle does well is to make many of the conflicts that do happen, except the recent one, to be highly believable. Such as Blythe being upset over Twilight telling the rest of the Mane 6 about her being a human due to her feeling guilty of keeping the secret.

But this brings up an even larger problem: Drizzle takes a page from the Equestria Girls movie and she brings up really great conflicts, but then resolves them in one chapter. It’s the conflicts that really prove how a character acts and deals with such situations, but when these are resolved so quickly, yes they prove how a character acts, but there's no real meaning behind the conflict in the first place. It screws up the story’s pacing as well, which is probably even more important, with scenes that should be drawn out just so they don’t feel awkward.

Now I’ll talk about the plot of the story. Obvious. I could see things were going to happen a mile away before they ever came up. This can make the story seem boring because it’s something a reader has already seen before. And the times that I was surprised at what was happening, those moments felt forced, or too coincidental. Such as the arrival of the Biskit twins. While Drizzle does combine the beginning of the story with them being in Equestria, it happens in the second half of the story at complete random just as a plot device.

A big thing that I found that i liked was the antagonist Zelda the zebra. Her character was complex, it was original, it was interesting, and I enjoyed reading her, even though she is an everyday bad girl due to her backstory not fully fleshed out. To me, she was the best character of the story, but it came at a cost. With Zelda’s reveal, the story lost tension and suspense that could’ve kept the readers hooked. Because of it, the story fell flat and became okay to read but not having a great need to see what’s going to happen. It’s more of Slice of Life type of story than an Adventure as Drizzle put it.

For these reasons, both good and bad, I’ve given this story a 6/10, a largely mediocre read mostly due to the plot choices. It gets a thumbs down in my book. But it had potential if some better choices were made about Zelda, which characters were to come in, who shouldn’t, and most of the problems I see could be mostly attributed to probably no planning beforehand. I think the people who would enjoy this story would probably be those who don’t care for stories that they had already seen, which is a large number, I’m just not one of them.