Dammit! · 8:34pm Oct 19th, 2013
Damn! I just deleted my first blog by accident! Fuck!
Well....It's not that bad I guess. Maybe a little, but I complimented two stories I really loved on that first post.
Now that I'm here; I might as well address some things about the FimFiction community.
First and foremost; the dedication on this site is insane.
Second - I'm currently on a writers block for future work as of last night. When that happens too me. I get pretty pissed and stare at my computer screen for 2-3 hours with a half-written chapter. Then when 3:00 AM hits every night! Out of all the time in the world! My creative juice flows again in unexpected numbers. Pretty soon I would be pumping out 500-1,000 words an hour, then re-check it all. Delete a 2/4 and refine the half that I have and work with it towards the rest of the night. But before I can do my usual check for miscellaneous minor difficulties like wording and spelling check. School would fucking start in one hour! So I shut off my computer, wait ten minutes. My dad would tell me to get up so I would immediately have too - as the saying goes; don't mess with papa bear. Slugging out of my bed, I get my usual shit together and head to school. Come home at 3:30 and begin another cycle with writing for four hours. Not one. Fucking. Word. Would pop out of my head! 7:00 would be supper time. I chow down on some grub, re-focus myself. Get back on the computer for another hour, still nothing! I would then give up and play a bit of GTA-V to ease myself: Crank up the liquid-metal station on my sirius radio and rip out songs from Carcass, Judas priest, Metallica, Chimara, Pantera, Avenged Sevenfold, Slipknot, Anthrax, Death and a whole sleuth of other thrash-death-black and heavy metal bands that always played on the station. My friend who lives with us would bust his ass in and immeditaly steal my other internet cord and plug his xbox in and start playing some of his fru-fru games. Pissing me off, he would sit there and talk to me about life-moral goals and fucking religion - then a stroke of pure unluckiness he would start bickering about death, greek mythology and dragons. After two hours of this, I would kick him out and say he can come back tomorrow - I always forget to say don't come back instead of usually saying come back. Its kind of funny like that. Oh well I'm a nice person. Anyway's 11:00 would hit and time to turn off everything. Luckily my dad wouldn't come to my room, so I get extra time to write and look up music. I would either write lyrics or write my MLP story. MLP usually wins the fight now. I would maybe write one page and that would be it for the first hour. I would then go to sleep but I can't just get my sleep on just yet. So I race back the computer and sit there for four hours until - what do you fucking know! Three A.M rolls around and suddenly I got ideas shooting out of me like some guy ejaculating to a sock. However....7 AM comes around and now I start school again.
Third - Please god let me finish this story for people and for me. I want to make all the bronies either happy or hate me, I just want to accomplish this crushing trilogy that will take months to complete! FUCK! I wish I knew some people that could help me with this story.
Fourth - The only thing I'm doing right now is editing Chapter 1 on Equestria: Z.
I'd be happy to help with your story, if you want.
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That would be the most generous offer in the world - but can I ask?
How does one help with someone else's story?
Like what are the options?
1435724 Well, what do you want help with?
Grammar? Spelling?
What do you think is weakest about your story? I can take a look at it.
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Equestria: Z: The story of Twilight and the Pandemic Pt. I
Chapter: 1: On Edge (Prologue)
Personally when you look at the other chapters, what do you think?
I think the other ones do need improvement, since I'm new to writing I mean. However they are good as they stand.
Not chapter 1, however. That one still makes me cringe because I feel it's so bad. I mean, like its butchered up disasterpiece. I don't care for it, however the way it opened up the story is solid for me. So I would like if you can check it out and see where I went wrong. It would be really worthy of you to do that. And message me back on what goes and doesn't go with chapter 1.
Thanks.
1435831 All right, I'll look at CH 1, then, I'll put a message up.
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Thanks man
1436191 Looked at it, and posted a comment. Feel free to post back.
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Yeah, I just replied.
1436198 No prob, happy to help
If ya need anything else, just ask.
If you like Death, you should give a band called Decrepit Birth a listen or two. Their album Polarity is still one of my favorites, and they even have a pretty badass Death cover on it.
As for writer's block, I feel you. I'll get nothing done for days, sometimes weeks, then the next thing I know I've written 5k words in one sitting and the chapter is posted.
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That was more a example; I like the band, especially their final studio recording: The Sound Of Perseverance , still a haunting and final goodbye of Chuck Schuldiner, who passed on in 2001 (the year kind of ironic; considering our last conversation). I like the record but I haven't given the rest of their discography a true definitive listen as opposed to other metal music.
Writing block is a pure bitch but if I ever had it for weeks. Than I would be really furious because that's the too long for me. So every time I land in the rudder, I'm always hoping its just for the few hours or just the day instead of 2-4 days. That happened a few times. I am new writing, so writers block happens quite often and dear god I hope you didn't read my story! I'm not saying its awful but from the sharp eye of professionals; they all say it needs work and I believe them. So if you ever consider reading the story...Just don't be peeved that you've felt a little pissed to find grammar errors. It's not so much that the words are wrong - it is more to the point of the wording that seems just awkward. Like they all say English isn't my first language except I'm from Canada; now that wouldn't make sense but I see my error's now to which I am applying massive re-working too.
Decrepit Birth - I just downloaded the album; Polarity - so I will give you a full review on it sometime tomorrow of the next day. The band is in a genre I'm still relatively new too; "Technical Death Metal".
Now if you want my personal opinion - I don't listen to this genre much. I only own bothered to listen to four bands of that genre: The Faceless(Great fucking band especially with their new record; Autotheist), Annotations Of An Autopsy (They're crappy with deathcore but they're one Technical Death Metal album still chills me whenever I push play on my I Pod.), Death (Like I said, the last album was amazing.) and Fleshgod Apocalypse (Possibly the fastest drums I ever heard in my entire life, most notably on "Thru The Scars" as that is the fucking beast song to death metal.)
I just got your reply on my story.....FUCK!!!!!!!!!!!
I AM PISSED! Because now you'll give me your honest opinion on how shitty it is and that's going to fucking hurt me. 
Oh well.....I am going to solider on and take whatever quirky shots and personal opinions you're firing at me and use to to improve myself, once again....Good day, friend.
FUCK.
Controlling my anxiety, my anxiety.....
1442418 Haven't read your story, so no worries. I'll hold off on it until you feel comfortable with the chapters. And, hey, even though it feels like people are tearing you a new one, the fact that they've shown as much interest as they have means you've got something good on your hands.
Think about it like this. A story is comprised of two parts: the writing, and the storytelling. Seems confusing at first, but there's a difference between the two. I can write like a fucking fiend, but when it comes to storytelling I'm a damn amateur of the lowest caliber. Sometimes, telling a good yarn doesn't require beautiful, inspiring prose, or the possession of a massive lingual lexicon, or laser-precise articulation. Good characters, an interesting plot, and decent pacing don't require one to have graduated from Harvard with a doctorate in English. On the flipside, the greatest characters and the most enthralling story ever won't help you if you lack the writing acumen to fully convey your story to your readers.
If you can find yourself an editor or two, you should be just fine. If this is your first outing as an author, it goes without saying that the start is going to be a bit more awkward than you may have first envisioned. (Hell, I'm really good at writing, if not storytelling, and I had to rewrite the first chapter of Memories of a Phoenix twice until it felt like it was decent.)
As for the metal, Technical Death Metal, eh? I'd always heard it referred to as "Melodic Death Metal", or "melodeath", but I long ago gave up trying to keep track of all the damn metal subgenres there were. Right now, there are two subgenres of metal, to me: "This sounds fucking badass and awesome," and, "The fuck is this shit?"
You want any more suggestions, I've got a few up my sleeve. Machine Head is just my favorite band, but my tastes jump all over the place from classical to electronic pony remixes...
Oh! You could try a bit o' God Forbid! Crucify Your Beliefs is still, in my humble opinion, the most epic album closer ever. (Ignore the video, it's ripped from Aphex Twin's "Come To Daddy" and has nothing to do with the song.) Starts off a bit slow, but...well, give it a listen when you get a chance.
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I don't know what to say...
"And, hey, even though it feels like people are tearing you a new one, the fact that they've shown as much interest as they have means you've got something good on your hands."
That quote I took off you will forever fill my heart with joy because what you said there was extravagance and beauty to my ears. I am really grateful you said that.
You made me feel really confident with myself and hell even when you followed me gives me hope that you gave a damn to see what I have to offer - though you originally followed me for the sake of liking metal-music(At least I believe?). It doesn't matter to me; the only that matters is that you cared to message back all these times makes me feel pretty confident and quite eluded to better myself in writing - so thanks, friend!
The writing is my major problem - I have a low-esteem level for confidence when it comes to writing because I never know what sounds good to add to the story; I'll add two complex words than repeat several words for just once sentence to make it sound more practical and descriptive. That's my main problem.
Another one is character - sometimes I don't know how to drive the emotions of characters except happy one moment and mad the other. Basically I need a new fountain of ways to expand on my characters.
The opposite thing between us is I can handle a story-telling visual. Now I might sound off the cuff here because I don't know how far that pipe-dream goes for my sense of story-telling but I do understand the tools and means to pump out a good story and carry it forth, thoroughly. Plus I intend to lunge after long stories and oppose short stories more because long-stories give clarity and great detail.
Detail - is still a problem I am struggling with.
Just heard the whole Polarity album. I am indeed impressed with the quality of the music.
Song structure:
Songs don't carry on too long which I find myself excited with because this isn't a album that relies on length to exercise its point through the music.
Guitars - the riffing is very eccentric, almost thrash metal in its own right but more in vein with a band like Necrophagist; meaning it relies on the guitars more than anything else, but it isn't a bad thing. No, no. It's an upside because the enthusiasm behind the guitarist is quite noticeable and sounds like they're having fun making a genre they love.
Bass - is very unnoticeable and it makes me quite sad. Like Metallica's ...And Justice For All record, however when the bass is heard you would want to immediately head-bang yourself too it.
Drums - aren't overused like blast beats or drum machines; so its considered a big win when the band doesn't rely on the drums and double bass kick pedal to gravely enhance their sound to project the audience into awe.
Vocals - the vocals were an initial and potential problem for my ears but when I heard his voice capture the music - it took it too new heights and I am very fortunate to love this album more than I initially should have during the first spin.
Musically - The band itself doesn't rely on extra-long dueling riffs with the bass guitar or rhythm tailing behind the main guitarist - so instead the results let it breathe and aged like fine wine. And the horns during the final song gave it an atmospheric look, despite it being only thirty seconds. It provided the album with variety and variety is something I always approve of.
Performance level - The energetic performance behind the music was caught on early. You can tell these guys weren't looking for a possible radio-hit or some mainstream assorted music but instead the chance to be mesmerized by their sheer-aggression to rock the fucking stage and your bedroom with their ferocious set list of god smacking tracks.
Overall rating 8.5/10
Why I choose such a obvious percentage you see in every fucking magazine, internet website and in common places like you're hometown?
Really because the songs are just too short. I know I said that short seems better but for the love of all god; I love 7:00 minute songs and 5:00 minute songs, even 9-13 minute songs are tasty to my tongue. But a lot of 2:00 minute songs doesn't give me clarity for the music, despite their amazing performance and sweet riffs.
The bass is my second problem. I don't hear it all that much, and I don't think you should crank the bass full up during the mixing process like Iron Maiden or Kiss does, but if its nearly inaudible than I find no point in adding a bass lick to each song. No sir-ree bob.
As for extra suggestions on storytelling, detail and writing would be most valid to my work and my perception on writing. Please if you want, can you explain some of your knowledge too me.
I hope you liked the review and I am quite shocked to have liked this album so much. Its sounds cliche to say, but I can't really stop listening to this. It's fucking good.
All the best, friend.