what story do you what

Hi there Matt here saying this what story do what me to do first Ponies with Pokemon or Beyblade or Pony league unlimited you choose ok.

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[MidnightTwister]

I don't believe my opinion matters, but I guess I'll say it anyways. I'd say a PokemonxMLP Crossover. I don't really know the other two except Beyblade, but I prefer Pokémon more than that.

[morrisonmatt32]

1167435 all my readers opinion matters to me i well keep that in mind ok.

[morrisonmatt32]

1167435 i real do not know how to make a great start to my stoy cn you help please.

[MidnightTwister]

1167458 I'll try. Here's some advice.

1) Don't rush it. No one likes things that are rushed.

2) Be as descriptive as you can be (by that I mean describe scenery, characters, etc.).

3) Foreshadowing is important. [OPTIONAL]

4) Allow character development. You want people to be attached/interested in the characters (that way if one of the characters die, the readers feel something).

4.5) Give characters a decent backstory. [OPTIONAL]

5) Use cliffhangers; Readers like cliffhangers although they sometimes will say: DAMN YOU CLIFFHANGERS!! Cliffhangers leave a lot of suspense. [OPTIONAL]

6) Use correct grammar and spell words as correctly as you can. Grammar Nazis (Such as myself) find this important.

This is pretty much all the advice I can give you. Sorry I can't give you more, but this is all I can think of off the top of my head.

[morrisonmatt32]

1167477 thank for that but how do i describe scenery i am not good what that.

[MidnightTwister]

1167499 If the character(s) is/are at a hospital, describe the room they are in. Describe the details on the wall, describe the floor, and describe the bed. Here's an example...

The walls of the hospital room had a brown wooden lip near the floor and had teal/white vertical-striped wall paper on them. The floor was made of white marble with a black diamond pattern. And the bed itself had white sheets, the covers were navy-blue with a pink diamond pattern, and the pillows were white.

[morrisonmatt32]

1167545 ok thanks but how do i describe a war in Equestria

[morrisonmatt32]

1167545 i tell you that i not spell that good and that where i need help at but no one well help me out and my Grammer is bad that what they said about me.

do you anyone can help me out help me out here.

[MidnightTwister]

1167557 I'm not completely sure about that one. But I'll try anyways!

EXAMPLE!

Location: Changeling Village, Land Of The Changelings
Date: February 6, 2153
Time: 0800

A team of ponies, consisting of six stallions and five mares, moved through the empty streets. All but one of them were the same; they had white coats, golden armor, had wings, and wielded M16s which were mounted on their shoulders. The mare that was different, however, was a Unicorn with a navy-blue coat, a short black Mohawk, a black tail that bound in a pony-tail, and purple irises. She adorned a black breast plate, silver boots, and a black helmet that left her face and Mohawk uncovered. She wielded a SPAS 12 Shotgun which was mounted on her left shoulder plate.

All across the ground lay dead Changeling soldiers, each having black armor and an AK-47 next to them, bullets casings laying all across the ground in random places.

Sorry I couldn't continue the scene, I am kinda in a hurry as I just now got another notification. Again I am sorry I couldn't continue this scene. Well, LATER!

[morrisonmatt32]

1167677 ok thanks

[MidnightTwister]

1167653 I don't know anyone that can help you, really. But maybe you could try writing short stories on Microsoft Word (if You Have It) to get better. And every time you write a chapter, ask a family member to read through it and give you advice. That's what I did all my life up to now(I'm Currently 13) to get better.

[morrisonmatt32]

1167702 yes i have Google drive and Grammer Checker for Grammer.net but they steel say my Grammer is bad.

[MidnightTwister]

1167712 Well, I'm sorry, but I don't know what advice I could give you now. Well, except maybe you could read different stories to get better. That's what I did. I read a lot of stories to help me get better at being descriptive/using correct grammar/spelling correctly. But that's all the advice I have right now.

[morrisonmatt32]

1167732 ok thaks

[MidnightTwister]

1167780 You're welcome.