Chapter redo. What has changed: · 11:39pm Jun 11th, 2013
Okay then. As usual I will attempt to keep this super short. I finished redoing the first chapter, and decided to rename it as the prologue since so many people felt it was all setup. You're not wrong. It kinda was all setup.
Now, I wasn't really very unhappy with how things went or the prose so I didn't really "re-write the chapter." If you already read it, only the last scene with the characterization with Dusk has changed really. Everything else I did was trimming and editing.
Changes.
>Shorter, and more efficient.
>Arcana is now powerful and unstable magic, rather then godly magic. In retrospect that made him sound too powerful and that's just no fun.
>Dusk is more childlike because that's what I wanted.
>He talks awkward but doesn't come off like a robot.
>Took just about all his powers away until he earns them this time.
Have a nice day
—Plague
PS: "Chapter 1" is in the works (currently like 2K or something) but I'm in the middle of finishing some summer classes so it might be a little bit. I'm aiming to take no more than a week because I don't want to make people wait that long but at the same time I'd rather I take the time to do it right (as well as pass my classes) than write something in a rush and it not be good.
Great day for posting this update, I'm occupied for the next 12 hours! D:
But from the looks on the summary, you got everything done correctly now, so that's already a huge plus.
And for the love of god, do NOT rush things. The magical thing about being an independent author is that you don't have any schedules to follow, so keep it that way, for the sakes of everyone.