Shin Equus Tensei proofreading done. · 10:47am Mar 14th, 2012
So the proofreading for Shin Equus Tensei is done (at least to my mediocre standards). I've made a few changes to the story, which I will list some below.
-COMPs have been replaced by upgraded mobile phones. This is because phones are less conspicuous than handheld game consoles with two screens. Also, COMPs are also inconvenient to carry around and harder to use.
-Berry Punch's swearing has been cut down. Too much f-words for my liking.
-Bon-Bon has been omitted. In retrospect, introducing her was a bad idea (I don't want to introduce too many characters at once). She'll now become a part of a certain future social link.
-The special district numbers have changed.
-Queen Solaris is now Queen Lumina.
-Fixed numerous grammatical and formatting errors.
-Dubhe alien ice cream is best ice cream. It tastes like rainbows and bubblegum.
If you guys find anything strange or wrong, don't be afraid to notify me.
<Going to write the next chapter now>
