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You know, I get why it takes forever for the "AWESOME" fanfics to get updates: It's a constant cycle of editing, coming up with ideas, editing, finding character names that fit, editing, debating over which variation of words to use, editing, finding your muse for some days and worst of all
SOMETIMES, YOU GET TIRED FAIRLY EASILY!!!!!
In any case, this has been fun. Now, who wants to see Sethisto's favorite pony in the next episode!? That's right... I'm talking about Snails.
5577441 HAha. Thanks for putting up with me Flamerz, you've been a real aid.
Congratulations, joshscorcher. You will never hear her say the word "lame" again.
Nice job, dude!
5577736 Thanks Shadow
This chapter was amazing. It was interesting to see Dusk attempt to placate Gilda by following her customs and watching Dash's realization that is not such a great friend as she thought. The flashbacks of Dash's past and the fight scene with Gilda were very powerful. It was moving to see how many ponies quickly we to after her when Gilda hurt Scootaloo. In the subject of relationships, I'm glad that Dash finally acknowledged her feelings for Dusk and that her introduction to Dusk's herd will come soon, given how her 18th birthday will be in the next interlude. Also, like Dusk and AJ, I find myself curious as to how Fluttershy and Rarity formed their master/pet relationship and would love to see more in the future. Thanks for the amazing chapter.
5577875 Thanks! This turned into a real monster of a chapter with a few reveals earlier then I had planed, yet at the same time, It was a real joy to write. I'm glad you picked up on so many of the small hints and foreshadowing. Did you figure out the identity of Silk's spy before I revealed it at the end?
5577930 I think the spy is Colgate. Why else would she conveniently return to Ponyville on the same day Gilda was visiting?
5577966 Haha, aye. The letter was the giveaway.
5577976 Question will there be an episode where you focus on Rarity and Shy's "relationship"?
5577996 Very!
5578000 What about Dusk giving Redheart the answer over whether he'd sleep with her or not? Would there be more of Luna and Redheart's interactions?
5578009 We shall see!
okay so did they get the ring off of dusk's horn and also how did gilda put on there so easily? and one more question, is the hooded figure that was mention a foreshadow for the future?
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Fairly certain that the hooded figure was the spy/Minuette ready to take Gilda down. As for the horn ring, Shining did say that Dusk might be stuck with a scar on his horn from it so I assume they got it off.
5578683 for a second there i almost thought this was gonna become a doctor strange scenario where dusk is depressed because he can no longer use his magic and goes on a quest to unlock his magic and then ends with that he can already use magic and his mind was keeping him from doing it. but what im more concern about is why he let gilda put the ring on him so easily. i mean now my view for dusk shine in this story is that he is incredibly weak and can barely use his magic before getting tired. how is he gonna deal with future enemies?
As always, you have put together another great chapter! Your detail into this Equestria's society and system are unique and well thought out. Putting the characters into that society, and making them compatible, is also very good.
I especially liked how you added in other characters such as Redheart, Scootaloo, and Fluttershy's pets and made their plotlines relate to the current scene at hand. That is to be comendable, as it can be certainly difficult to accuratley portray characters correctly while simaltaneosly balancing all the plot lines and still making it a great and interesting read.
Your scene with Shining Armor and Luna's agent at the end was a nice touch. I hope Gilda enjoys Tarturus.
Also...was that Zecora with the hood? I bet it was. I for one, am looking forward to your next chapter. Keep up the good work!
With Deepest Regards,
Polaris501
5578699 You forget that even in the show, Twilight was incredibly less-talented and not as powerful as she now in comparison. This early in the story, that similarity is to be expected.
Also, this stories's Gilda comes off to me as the gangster type, as a stereotype. She might have been planning to drag Dusk and Dash back to the Griffon Empire regardless of the outcome of the meeting, so she was obviously prepared and waiting for an opportunity to slap that ring on. And the knowledge that Gilda put it on Dusk, and not Rarity, meant that Gilda had known beforehand that Dusk was extremely powerful.
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5578699 Actually I think the hooded figure was Zecora, knowing that the zebra should be showing up pretty early.
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1: Thanks for reading!
2: They did, it will come up again in Interlude 5 during Dusk's checkup.
3: In fact that was not the archer, but another foreshadowing!
4: Yes, this will effect Dusk's Magic for a while, but its a subarc, it won't be replacing anything or generating interludes of it's own.
5: Think of it this way, Gilda and Dusk are both about the same age, but Gilda was brought up fighting for every scrap of food she ate, while Dusk only played sports at SSU to make Celestia happy. The fact is, his reaction time is SLOW compared to a true warrior.
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1: I am doing my best to keep it unique!
2: You have to thank Frankie and ShadowThunder for the Angel and Harry the Bear Scene. Shadow made the list and joked about how it would be a really cute cutaway, and Frankie was bored and did a fantastic job writing the first take of the scene, that I used almost completely word for word.
3: The Scootaloo Subplot was a minor expansion of a plotline I've been brewing in my head, this felt like a good time to show Dash's loyalty to her student, and it helped establish Gilda as a monster before the fight. Happy solutions!
4: Shining and Silk are quickly becoming a joy to write. Both will have cameo's during Interlude 5 and many following chapters.
5: Maybe it was, who can say!
6: Exactly right, thus why I am building Dusk in small steps over time. Re: His visit with Princess Cadence, hidden behind Cadence's public display of looking into Scootaloo.
7: Dash, yes. Dusk became a target of opportunity. The ring was always planed to take down the strongest Unicorn she might have to deal with, as she has never learned her lesson from fighting Rainbow Blitz. [or rather, she learned the wrong part of that lesson.]
8: Can you please spoiler tag that first statement in the second sentience of your last post, as it is a major plot point. Thanks!
It shall be rectified Captain!
5579890 thanks!
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Ahh that was the perfect chance to pull a "make it so" lol. (and you thought my Golden Sun comment was nerdy!)
5579901 I was out shopping, and now I feel like a failure as I was watching next gen just last week on Netflix
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*pats back* Is ok, we all miss our timing at some point.
Boy, Dusk gets hurt a lot in this story. Beaten by maddened goddesses, overusing magic, utilizing magic beyond his ability, getting illegal suppressors placed on his body. Is there something more to this pattern?
5581972 Dusk Shine's Saga: Sadomasochism is Magic!
Haha, no, don't worry, things are going to slow down violence wise in a few more chapters. Dusk's just had a really rough year.
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5584699 Well thank you! And don't worry! Unlike my normal progress, Interlude 5 is already 5/8th's done. Can't wait to see what you'll think!
5593495 poor Fluttershy. She finally tries to stand up for her friends and it's against a god.
Continuity of AJ's continued fragile condition, cute acknowledgement of Rarity as the lead mare in the herd, anthro animals fortifying the cottage (loving this interpretation of Angel as, for lack of a better term, Fluttershy's beta), a realistic portrayal of a toxic romance, a fantastic revision of the reason for Pinkie stalking Gilda, and... nope. That about covers all my favorite parts.
Damn...Dusk really need some military training.
So... Colgate sells cigarettes?! Talk about Irony!