Feeling something pulling at her top, she looked down to see Sparky tugging at it. Curious, she bent down to his level and put the photos on the floor. Sparky hugged her, burning his head in her neck. Misty was taken aback, but wrapped her arms around him gently.
burning his head in her neck. should be burying his head in her neck. Burning would be bad.
Maybe once the herd comes out to Misty and she tells them she is aware, they would hide Zipp and Pipp being 'close' thinking she and other ponies would hate them for it. Few chapters later a tearful Zipp and Pipp are somehow talking about not being as affectionate they want to be. Misty finds out somehow and maybe is OK with it? Just an idea to work it in somehow. I'd just like them to be happy, and I love Sparky having 5 moms.
I'm guessing Alpha and Haven are distracting Misty for the herd to have some 'together' time. (Someone setup to watch Sparky?)
11780567 I intended for this book to be romance focused with sexual references, but never outright sex. My proofreader felt the story was devolving into nothing but porn, and upon a reevaluation I realised they were right. I therefore unpublished chapters two and three so I could edit them to a be a bit less explicit. Both chapters have been altered and are now available again.
I wonder if they're going to run too any racist ponies who don't like it the idea of ponies racing a dragon.
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I mean, I probably wouldn’t race a dragon either
burning his head in her neck. should be burying his head in her neck.
Burning would be bad.
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Good catch. Thank you.
Maybe once the herd comes out to Misty and she tells them she is aware, they would hide Zipp and Pipp being 'close' thinking she and other ponies would hate them for it. Few chapters later a tearful Zipp and Pipp are somehow talking about not being as affectionate they want to be. Misty finds out somehow and maybe is OK with it? Just an idea to work it in somehow. I'd just like them to be happy, and I love Sparky having 5 moms.
I'm guessing Alpha and Haven are distracting Misty for the herd to have some 'together' time. (Someone setup to watch Sparky?)
11780567
I intended for this book to be romance focused with sexual references, but never outright sex. My proofreader felt the story was devolving into nothing but porn, and upon a reevaluation I realised they were right. I therefore unpublished chapters two and three so I could edit them to a be a bit less explicit. Both chapters have been altered and are now available again.