As far as your writing goes it's really not that bad, a proof reader would solve all your problems. My question is; is this going to be a pure fetish driven clopfic or are we going to get some character / story development?

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I was considering a whole "Vampire"isque sort of thing, but it's really overdone and overrated. It was going to flesh out Luna as the progenitor of all the tales and mythos about blood thirsty ponies throughout history. Still may, but again, cliche as heck too.

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Yeah I don't think anybody wants another vampire romance thriller. You don't even need to do that, there aren't many stories with the sisters where they're romantically involved AND there's some story involved other than pure fucking. There are some dead stories or ones that never got a sequel but this shipping doesn't see much action outside the bedroom sadly.

A nice little one-shot would good punctuation and grammar. hope to see you write more on these two be it romantic or otherwise.