Thanks to the magic of friendship and a lot of luck I've managed to find a special somepony who will be helping me out with the myriad problems my 40k story suffers from. So, in addition to the hundreds o fmea culpa's I owe for having published my work in such an unready state almost... wow, almost a year ago, I can give the good news that all the horrible obvious beginner mistakes that were made throughout. Hopefully all the negatives of poor style will fade away, leaving the core of