If you did, and give me specific reasons why, not just condescending rants about it being shit.

I feel so many different emotions at once right now. It doesn't seem real. I just don't know. I mean, I'm proud of my story and everything, but I feel so insecure. If you don't like my stories, please give me tips on how to improve my writing. Don't just say "it's shit". That's just crass. I want to improve, but I can't if nopony tells me how.

Any better than my other story?