Added in some extra dialogue, some better descriptions to better depict how people are feeling. I think the entire thing flows better now. I stil gotta watch how I keep starting every sentence with "I did this" or "I did that"

*Cracks neck* sweet lord these long chapters are murder. I mean yes they're long, but I've read them so many damn times, especially this chapter. I had spent a long time trying to make the descriptions short, sweet, meaningful and poetic. I still saw some previous dialogue problems, back when I'd say the body language of who's talking, then put in a comma, followed by the dialogue. Granted this was one of the first scenes I wrote before I had actually began the story. Before chapter 1 was even

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Another longish chapter, but I think I started editing this one but never finished. There was a lot of basic dialogue that needed some sprucing up and plenty of room for more flavorful vocabulary everywhere. Didn't see much in the way of editing, besides a few unclear descriptions and actions. The ending seems s tad cliche, but this can't really go any other direction. It may also be that I'm tired of re-reading all these chapters over again. I'll confess though, these later chapters are

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I finally finished it! Thank you everyone for being so patient! The past few weeks have sucked ASS! Do me a solid and leave me some feedback on this next chapter, please and thank you?

I know I said I'd be posting one more chapter then doing massive rewrites but...

I really wanna just continue the story for a bit since you all were so patient with me. I'm already a 1000 words in on my next chapter. What is everypony's opinion so far? Are you finding the trial interesting? I wanted to take a small break from all the combat since it takes so much time to write and describe everything. Feel free to message me your predictions, but please don't post spoilers publicly.

No matter how hard I tried, this chapter just keeps coming up short. Everything I try to add, breaks the flow of the chapter. I wanted to lengthen it, but there honestly isn't a good place to do it. I'll come back to it later I guess.

Next chapter is going up as long as I don't accidentally sleep through prime time!

Didn't see much in the way of editing. This chapter still feels a tad messy for me, so maybe I'll come back to it.
(EDIT)
Alright, there. Spruced up some descriptions and explained some more stuff. I'm in this middle ground of wanting to explain Taraskan protocol, and not wanting to bore most of you with ideas that you won't care about.

I'm on chapter 5 currently for editing. Ugh some of these chapters are just so...sloppy. Like some sentences are bland and disorganized, others make me wonder how they got past my editing. In my defense, I was still rather new at writing.

Got a bit of work done on the next chapter and I finished editing chapters two and three!

This dialogue was irritating because there's a ton of dialogue that has to happen at this time. I tried to break it up with a few brief moments of interactions between characters and backstory, but it still feels dull to me. This is also one of those ties where I wanted to hint at something, while secretly planning something else. There's still that worry of it coming across as bad writing, but owell.

AAAGGGHHH! I've never tried to describe people doing choreographed dances before. Describing the beat of a drum and fire twirling, I just...uuuggghhh. I already wrote everything in the chapter that isn't dance/music related and it feels like I just have this massive hurdle.

So in this one, some of my chapters are formatted weird cause around this time, fimfic was having issues with uploading a doc from google docs and copypaste got weird too. Didn't see much that needed changing, but I spruced up the formatting.

Agh chapter 46 is kicking my ass! There are so many friggin long convos! Don't get me wrong, they're all important, but uuuggghhh! I think that's been one of the main challenges with writing KOTD, is all the different emotions this novel has. A lot of it I REALLY have to be in the mood. Some chapters are me "venting" after having a nasty panic attack or just old memories from my PTSD.

Chapter 37
There was like...several words missing in chapter 37. I was actually shocked how it happened without me every noticing.

Chapter 38
Made like...there was a brick of dialogue, split it in half. That was it haha!

I think I may have edited this chapter before. There wasn't much to fix except the usual and a few odd descriptions.

Honestly, if you're waiting for my edits to finish, don't bother. I'm just kind of nit-picking and looking for things to spruce up. I haven't found much, if anything, in the way of errors.

I realized I misworded some of the depictions of where he is. It was crystal clear in my head , but this is how you learn hehe.