Hi everypony! I wrote a no pony minecraft fic over here on fanfiction and would like some feedback on it. Its a yogscast SoI fanfic where the heroes failed to save minecraftia from Israphel.
Any thoughts?

2616036 Well, it has to have ponies in it to be posted here. Don't you know that? Post on an different site if no pony.

2616145 ah.....

2616194 Kinda sucks, but I'll link to a different site.

Eh, it's not bad

2616196 Actually, there are no rules regarding stuff like this. Come on, all I want it some honest feed back from a diverse group of people.

2616036
Pretty good. Could do without that much cussing though, and the punctuation needs some work, but, all in all, it's a good try.

2616285 Shite, I thought you posted it on this site. Deepest apologizes. As for the story, it's fine.