This forum is for ideas for the upcoming story idea, Equestria Ninja Girls: Ice Sprint.

In this story, Rainbow Dash is tasked by ACME’s Chief to run across the country that's covered in snow to deliver a heart to a sick little girl, but there are people trying to stop her.

This is based on the Young Justice episode Coldhearted.

This will be first EQNG written by me. So I hope you guys will help come up with some good quotes.

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Awesome. Go for it, my friend. Maybe our friends including myself can help you with the grammar check.

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Hmmm, I may not know some parts, but I do have something in mind for the ending. And maybe...this could be Rainbow's birthday.

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Right around the afternoon after the weather had been cleared up, Rainbow leaned near the Canterlot High Statue, thinking about certain events that happened:

Applejack: You okay there, Rainbow?

Rainbow turned and saw the rest of her friends and the turtles coming along:

Rainbow Dash: Yeah...just thinking about what happened today. Can't believe VILE would go this far. 

Leo: I know right? The little girl being the future ruler of a foreign country.

Donnie: Not to mention her uncle plotting to kill her when he hired VILE.

Sunset Shimmer: But what could VILE have gained from all of this?

Carmen Sandiego: We have an answer for that.

They saw Carmen and her friends, along with Chief appearing:

Rarity: Oh, Carmen. It is good to see all of you again.

Carmen Sandiego: The feeling's mutual.

Raph: So what was it you were going to say?

Chief: Apparantly sometime ago, the Princess' uncle had tried to overthrow the kingdom for a long time, but the princess, now queen, was not to be easily overthrown. Until one of our contacts told us that the Princess had fallen ill and would need a new heart for it.

Player: When her uncle found out, he hired VILE to help put a stop to it. And if they succeeded, then not just the kingdom's resources, but the kingdom itself would be under their control.

Jules: But for extra precaution, they used their own weather machines to blanket the country in order to stop the heart from getting there.

Carmen Sandiego: That's why the chief reached out to me and my friends in order to help put a stop to it, but we knew it wouldn't be enough, so we called all of you.

Chief: Indeed. And Twilight, thank you for helping Player how to figure out how to help deactivating the weather devices.

Twilight: Thanks. There was a lot of talk about a new weather machine to help in the plains of Africa. When I heard they were stolen, I decided to do some research to it.

Fluttershy: Still, we're sorry we couldn't help Rainbow.

Pinkie Pie: Yeah, we had to help shut down the weather machines.

Mikey: Plus, you were the only one with the speed to help. And girl, you just helped saved an entire country from two enemies.

Rainbow Dash: Yeah, I guess I did.

However, they saw her feeling a bit off:

Leo: You okay there, Rainbow?

Rainbow Dash: Yeah, just thinking about today. See, when my birthday started, I thought everything was going great. Then VILE came along and nearly ruined everything. But, near the end of the day...after what I've seen and that I realized, that the greatest birthday gift someone like me could get...(smiling)...was watching that little girl smile.

Everyone was surprised to hear how humble she sounded:

Principle Celestia: It's a good feeling, isn't it?

They saw Principle Celestia and Vice-Principle Luna coming along after they heard the news, with Chief smiling as they looked at one another:

Chief: Celestia and Luna. You two look well.

VP Luna: It's been a while.

Applejack: Wait, y'all know each other?

Principle Celestia: We were at college together. 

Everyone was surprised by this, whilst Principle Celestia and Vice-Principal Luna walked over to Rainbow:

Principle Celestia: What you did today was quite the miracle Rainbow. Like Michelangelo said, not only did you save a little girl, but another country. Though things may not have worked out the way you wanted, seeing a child smile can bring a great feeling.

VP Luna: When we took to teaching, we wanted to help nurture and guide students every day to be the best they can be. And the moment you girls came together and did many things, even with the turtles, we couldn't be more proud of the people you became.

Principle Celestia: (Placing a hand on Rainbow's shoulder) And we still are.

Rainbow and the girls couldn't help but smile at that, even Rainbow felt proud of today.

Principle Celestia: Seeing that today is still your birthday, we would love to help celebrate it with you, our treat.

Rainbow Dash: You sure?

Principle Celestia: We are.

VP Luna: (looking at chief) And you and the others are more than welcome to join us.

Chief: (smiles) It has been a long time since we've spoken. I would be more than happy to.

Pinkie Pie: Yay, time for a Rainbow Dash birthday and saving the world birthday!!!

Everyone soon left to celebrate Rainbow's birthday further.
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So what do you think, I hope this will help.

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This is a good idea. I may change some things, but it’s still good. Thank you, my friend.

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Hey, no prob. What are ENG buddies for?

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Awesome, and nice touch Chief knew Celestia and Luna in college

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Well, you kind of gave me the idea. Seeing that the Turtles' friend Kurtzman knew Celestia and Luna, why not the same for them and the Chief?

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Yeah. In my KP story I was thinking of having them know Barkin, but then I decided not to do it

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Good call. I don't see them ever meeting either.

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Yeah, good idea because that would have been weird. 😓

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(After the uncle belittles Rainbow for her "failure")

Count: I will take my leave.

Rainbow: Before you go... I just wanna say one last thing...

Count: And what pray tell is that?

Rainbow: ... Got... yah...

Count: Hmm?

Then in a flash, Rainbow tore away the curtain and (villain name)'s jaw dropped in utter disbelief. Queen (girl's name) sat there, alive. Her bodyguards stood at her bedside along ACME agents Zari and Devineaux. And she did not look very happy at her uncle.

Rainbow: Nice little family reunion, huh?

Count: HOW?!

Rainbow: Like you said last night, it's nice to have friends. Friends who know how to shut down weather machines and friends who know how to set a trap for a royal jerkface like you! Oh, and speaking of last night... (she reached down and picked up her winter jacket, taking out a small hidden microphone.)

The count looked back as Agent Zari played a recording on her phone. "So the weather machines. The snow storm. VILE agents slowing me down. That was all part of your plan to murder your niece!"

Count: (recording) I am too modest to boast, but correct. It is nice to have friends. Now, what say we find out if I can kill two hearts with one sword!

Queen: Count (villain name), as queen of (country name), I hear by declare you guilty of high treason to the crown and thus revoke your diplomatic immunity and banish you from my country!

The Count glared before he let out a cry of rage, pulled drew his sword from his cane, and rushed at the queen, intending to kill her right then and there. But Rainbow suddenly zipped out of her bed and knocked the sword from his hands with a metal stand before she used it to knock him to the floor. Zari and Devineaux quickly rushed forward and subdued the Count.

Rainbow: I don't think so, your ex-royalness!

Count: Well played, Ms Dash. And by all means, let this victory go to your head!

As Zari and Devineaux escorted the Count away, Rainbow took his sword and sheathed it back into the cane.

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Rainbow the trickster strikes again

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Rainbow was running with the heart, making good time.

Rainbow: Okay, making good time. Just about half way. Just hope the girl hangs on.

Just then something came flying towards her. So Rainbow dodges, but grabs her on the leg. She looks down to see a bola.

Rainbow: What the?

Just then she heard a scream. She turns to see some guy about to attack her with a kick, only she grabs his leg and tosses him. The guy recovers and a girl shows up beside him.

Rainbow Dash: Who are you?

Boy: You can call me… Spinkick.

Girl: And I’m Flytrap.

Spinkick and Flytrap will be the first VILE operatives to try and slow her down.

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Wait, are those two cannon? Don't think I've heard of them.

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Whoops, nevermind. Looked it up, they are.

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Perfect way for Rainbow and the Rainbooms to meet the two newer graduates

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Rainbow blinked and thought to herself, "These two sound like Jake and Luz."

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They're also voiced by Jake and Luz's voice actors.

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Uh-huh

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Chief: You did very well, Rainbow Dash.

The gang turned to see Chief walking down the hall, but this time, no hologram. Live and in person.

Leo: Woah.

Twilight: I don’t believe it.

Chief: Yep, believe it.

Mikey approaches her.

Mikey: Wow, this hologram is very good, it’s almost like she’s actually here.

Mikey moves his finger closer to touch her, but Chief grabs it.

Chief: That's because I am here.

Mikey: Of course you are.

Mikey scurries back towards the others, looking embarrassed as the ninjas look at him with a “seriously,” look.

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It’s almost as shocking when Wade decided to leave the confines of his room for the first time to face Team Impossible

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Julia pulled out a pen, clicked it and dropped it on the ground. Soon a holograph of a woman appeared.

“Greetings Ninjas, Rainbooms, it's been some time,” Chief greeted them. She then noticed the banner. “And I see we interrupted a party. Happy Birthday Rainbow Dash.”

“Thanks, Chief.”

“So I take it there’s trouble?” Leo asked.

“Indeed,” Chief confirmed.

“Espera! Hold on!” Gabby interrupted the conversation. “Aren’t we gonna get some introductions here?”

“Yeah, who’s the ghost lady?” Zak asked.

“Guys, this is Chief, the leader of ACME,” Leo introduced ACME’s head. “And this Agent Julia Argent.”

“ACME?” Angel asked.

“The Agency to Classify and Monitor Evildoers,” Chief explained. “And no need for introductions. I know about each of out, Zach and Caitlyn, Buffy Shellhammer, Gabrielle, Carter and Angel Bridge. We’ve been aware of you since Rio.”

“Let’s just hope she’s nothing like Ms Nowhere,” Angel whispered.

“I assure you I’m nothing like her,” Chief interjected.

“Wait, you know Nowhere?” Gabby asked.

“Let’s just say she and I have a history,” Chief explained with a bit of disdain, which everyone understood.

Any chance you guys no the last names of the others?

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Zak's name is spelled Zach. And great dialog.

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Rainbow Dash continued running until she noticed a few things flying towards her. So she hid behind a nearby tree and took cover. She heard some sharp things hitting the tree. Once it stopped, she looked to see something lodged in the tree trunk. Rainbow picks it out and takes a look at it. It was a star... made out of paper.

Rainbow: Oh no.

That was when Rainbow noticed something skipping in the snow.

???: La la la, la la.

It was none other than VILE Operative, Paper Star.

Paper Star: Enjoying the snow, are we?

Rainbow: What are you doing here, Paper Star?

Paper Star: I’m hear to make certain of a heart break.... (equips with more paper stars) both hearts.

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Good opening.

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Ah the paper girl

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Here is some information on OCs of the story.

Princess Saunda Shaah: The ten-year-old princess of the kingdom of Reinkani. She requires a heart transplant, but her evil cousin once removed, Count Dushta Bisp, is trying to stop that from happening, so he can take the throne. She lost her parents when she was five, leaving her to raised by her grandmother, aunt and uncle.

Queen Unna Shaah: The queen of Reinkani, and Saunda’s grandmother.

Yod Nyaa: Yod is Queen Unna’s grandson and Saundra’s maternal cousin. He is Reinkani’s greatest young warrior. He is skilled in many fighting styles. He’s also quite knowledgeable about the Hamato Clan, as his mentor was also once a member of the Clan. He briefly helps Rainbow Dash fight off the enemies. Rainbow Dash also develops a bit of a crush on him.

Count Dushta Bisp: The Duke of Reinkani, cousin once removed of Saunda and Yod, and nephew of Queen Unna. He is a wicked man who plots to overthrow the royal family and rule the kingdom himself, even willing to make a deal with VILE to do it.

And that’s all I got at the moment. Also, the Kingdom would be an island nation just a few miles off the coast of India.

So, what do you think?

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Not bad on the characters

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I like it.

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Here's a funny scene.

Devinaux: (driving) You are welcome, mademoiselle Dash.

Rainbow: Uh, Devinaux, thanks for the help, but you might wanna look ahead.

Devinaux: Huh? (Sees too late a sharp turn coming) No no no no no no no! (Drives right off the edge.) Noooooooooooo! (Crashes right through a frozen lake and sinks to the bottom.)

Rainbow: Man, he really bad at driving. (Zips off)

(Devinaux sat sulking in his sunk car with a frown on his face as Agent Zari appeared on the screen with an annoyed look)

Zari: Why am I not surprised?

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Thanks for the idea. I’ll try to find a place for it.

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Zach and Caitlyn's last names are Roberts. Gabby's is Rivera.

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This is a little scene of Player explaining the OC country where the Princess is from, the country Reinkani

Player: I’ll be happy to fill you in. Reinkani is an Island nation just a few miles off the coast of India, located in the Indian Ocean. People of Indian, African and Spanish nationality began to settle there during World War II since it wasn't an official place back then. It wasn’t officially declared an individual country till the year 1948, after the Partition of India when more Indians secretly fled and settled there. The country became official after that. It was also said the country has its shared riches but no outsiders no why. The country is known for its Indian traditions, as Hindi is the primary language, while also having traditions of Spain and Africa. The name, Reinkani is actually a combination of the Spanish and Xhosa word for Kingdom.

That’s all I got at the moment. I’m hopping to add more later. If anyone has any ideas for this that would be helpful. I also hope I don't offend anyone by adding the Partition of India.

I’m also thinking that after this story, I might do a sequel with the group going to the country of Reinkani.

So, what do you think?

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Maybe Rainbow can face Brunt, based off Kid Flash fighting Vandal Savage.

Brunt: Your pretty fast, little speedster. But speed don't matter much against raw muscle!

(During their fight)

Rainbow: (runs towards Brunt at full speed and actually forces her back.) What was that about speed not mattering against raw muscle?

(After they fight and Rainbow gives her an uppercut at super speed.)

Rainbow: Didn't protect the face!

And when she takes the heart back after being tricked, and defeats the uncle along with Tigress, Le Cheve, and El Topo, based off Kid Flash beating Vertigo and his henchman.

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Coach Brunt should learn to take her own advice.

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List of VILE Agents Rainbow deals with while on her run.

• Spinkick and Flytrap
• Coach Brunt
• Paper Star

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Rainbow Dash continued to fight with Paper Star.

PaperStar: This ends for you, Speedy.

PaperStar was about to throw a star when a knife Knocked it out of her hand.

PaperStar: Who did that?

Both Rainbow and Paperstar look to see standing in the Blizzard was stranger, wearing a light brown cloak, goggles and a scarf around his mouth. He then threw a knife at Paperstar, but she dodged it.

Stranger: That heart is going straight to the girl. (The stranger pulled out a sword. He then turns to Rainbow) I’ll hold her off, get the heart to the girl.

Rainbow ran away as Paperstar was left to deal with the stranger, whose sword released another blade from the back.

A little introduction of my OC, Yod Nyaa. I’ve based him on the Red Dagger from Ms Marvel.

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Cool moment. Maybe the stranger could be the girl's brother, having spied on his evil uncle and tipped off ACME.

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Actually, he’s her cousin.

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Here’s a little something that will also serve as foreshadowing for the Carmen Sandiego saga for Rise of the Young Ninjas

The VILE faculty all sat at their table in VILE Castle, listening to the reports.

Maelstrom: So, Bisp has been arrested.

Cleo: And our operatives?

Maelstrom: The cleaners extracted them before they could be apprehended. But still, we had the Reinkani and its resources in our grasps.

Cleo: All those jewels and that castles. I was hoping we could live there instead of this cold and dreaded castle.

Bellum: Speaking of cold, those snow machines, destroyed.

Brunt: And for once, it wasn’t Carmen Sandiego, but those Turtles and Rainbooms.

Cleo: They are definitely a problem, especially with that magic.

Bellum: I’ll admit, I am quite interested in it.

Maelstrom: Indeed. Perhaps we should keep an eye on them, and find a way to harness that magic.

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Hey when Rainbow faces Bisp, Tigress, Le Cheve, and El Topo. Tigress can swipe her geod so she can't use her speed.

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