Story Title: Title of the story you're reviewing. Example: Cutie Mark Mafia: Once you're In...
Rating out of 5: What you would rate the story on a 5-star system. Rate fairly. Example: 4.2
Strengths: Name at least 3. Example:
1. Good pacing
2. Strong vocabulary
3. Excellent character development
Weaknesses: Name at least 3. Example:
1. Inconsistent tense
2. Abrupt transitions
3. Unnecessary run-on sentences
Additional notes: This where you should elaborate on the strengths and weaknesses you recognized above, as well as any other comments or constructive criticism you have. Example:
Your pacing for this story is spot-on! The story always seems in rhythm, but it doesn't ever get boring. You also had very strong vocabulary; it really enhanced the story and when it was used in dialogue it really helped develop the characters, especially during the interrogation scene. Awesome job!

Some thing you should work on is making sure to stay in one tense. When narrating, I noticed you often switch between past and present tense. If you fix that, it would cause less confusion among readers. Although your pacing is good throughout most of the story, there were a few parts where you rambled a little bit, most notably in the scene where Scootaloo and Applebloom are talking about Sweetie Belle's betrayal of the family. You also stopped abruptly a few times, and it felt as if it sent the rest of the chapter out of rhythm. This happened a lot in chapter 3. If you comb over the story and look out for these things and change them, I think it would really enhance the overall quality.

Final Words This should be where you sum up your review in a sentence or two. Example:
Great concept, you put a new spin on the CMC, and the gory scenes added a great shock factor to the story. You did great, just make sure to spend a little more time on those pesky tenses and transitions.