Butterfly Fly Away (what is with the title, may I ask?)
Slice of life
1,222 words (single-chapter)
7/10 in the grammar department, with little misspellings near the end and indented wall of text
Characterization: 10/10, it sounds like things Fluttershy would say in the show--and what's more, it's her recital of the show's events, mainly Nightmare Moon and Discord
Show canon: 10/10, since it's being recited from Fluttershy's first-person memory
Plot consistency: 9/10, since it's a recital of show events being crammed into over-1k words
Use of OCs: N/A
Coherence: 9/10, 10/10 if you can get past the aforementioned text wall
Extra things depending on genre: N/A

Before I score, might I offer some advice? Have an editor look over this fic, mainly to get the errors you missed. Also, could you please fix the wall of text? I lost my place a few times just trying to slog through it (though the indented paragraphs helped a lot in this case.)

Since I've graded in five categories, the score is 45/50 and thus passes, though this review is up for debate.