Royalty for a Day

I wanted some feedback for my story as it's my first time with both Luna and Pipsqueak as the main characters. I had some help with the accents but wanted to see some extra feedback before the second chapter is written. It's a light story, not to focused on excitement but it focuses on culture as much as the characters.

Fair warning: the first chapter is 11K words and the second, and last, will be a decent length as well.

-Piquo