Hello names Hingard
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/69626/guardian-of-the-hearthfire
Silver and Crystal lived ordinary lives in the town of Nightingale. Until their daughter is targeted by a radical group of ponies obsessed with finding the mythical Hearthfire in order to take over Equestria.
Not really looking for anything in particular just trying to get more people's opinion on the story, and what I could do to make it better as it goes on.

Yo Hingard what's up?!

I gotta say your story is pretty awesome so far man. Silver and Crystal could use a bit of character development, but I remember you saying that you would be doing that so no worries there. I gotta say I like the idea of a group of ponies trying to overtake Equestria. Can't wait for chapter 2! No really...I CAN'T WAIT!!!

602056 Yea, I've been working on chapter 2 for a while, trying to get all the scenes just right, I hope to have something by the end of this week to give to my editor. but I can tell you this Chapter 2 will be a little slower adding in new characters and setting up for later chapters

Chapter 2 is up if anyone wants to give it a look.