So as i think I mentioned in a blog of mine, I'm writing an additional chapter to finish off Blood of Olympus for an English project

Basically it's where Percy (and Annabeth) reunite with his mom (and Paul) after what happened it BoO

I have quite a bit of it written, but because I'm supposed to be writing in Rick Riordan's style, I feel as if my writing is a bit... lacking. (in what, i cant say)

If any of you are in the Percy Jackson/ Heroes of Olympus fandom and would want to take a look at this, I would love feedback!
You can be critical and harsh, but I'd appreciate specific critiques (unlike Rainbow Dash's "20% cooler" comment)

Anywho- link to for viewing and commenting is here
(if i know u super well i can give u the editing link too)

Thanks again!

5224078 I like it!

5224114 thanks!
is there anything you think i need to change?