Quick questions to the readers of Mare Dolorum · 12:57pm Nov 7th, 2012
This is the first time I've written a work of fiction with a first-person narrator, and I'd like your feedback on whether it's working out or not.
The story's going to become more dialog-heavy from chapter 4 onward. How do you feel about the way the hermit has been paraphrasing his own speech instead of directly quoting himself? Is it annoying? Pretentious? Acceptable?
Also, is it bothersome that the hermit doesn't describe what he looks like right off the bat, but just drops hints about his physiology here and there?
Please fill me in on these or any other aspects of the story you'd like to mention so that I may lurn too rite mor bettur.
Gracias,
TinCan