Mare Doloris Ch. 18 edited · 7:51pm Sep 10th, 2013
One of my readers was helpful enough to point out that the narrator forgets about the audio evidence he gathered in the previous chapter.* After reviewing, I find I agree that he shouldn't have done that. I made some edits and added some dialogue to the latest chapter (18: "Convalescence") in an attempt to fix this oversight. All edits are after the "dream sequence".
Thanks, FinalFan!
*at least, I assume that's the "damning evidence of supernatural mind control" being referred to.
Edition is good, but next chapter will be better. At least for me.