Summary Change · 4:22pm Feb 28th, 2018
Okay, a little heads up everypony! I got a comment from one of the members of Fimfiction and he gave me some feed back about the title for my story. They mentioned that it was literally screaming Mary sue and that I should try to change it up some. Here's what they meant:
Ever since she was a filly, Son Goku Kakarot Shenron was not your typical everyday mare, or everyday pony. In fact, being born into a family with the combination of all three of the Equine Pony Tribes, Earth Pony, Unicorn, and Pegasus, along with the powers and blood of a Dragon at your disposal leaves you living a life that is anything but normal.
Now that I took another look at it, I can definitely see why they think that
. When I said that my OC had the combine powers of Earth Ponies, Unicorns, and Pegasus ponies, I made her sound like an Alicorn, even though she was a Pegasus. So yeah, I had that fixed up right away, but I didn't take out the fact that she had the powers of a dragon in her. I left that inside
. Still, I cannot see how I made the title of my story sound like a Mary sue, especially since I saw an MLP style fanfiction of Beauty and the Beast, that made the Main Character look like she was a Mary sue
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Anyway, that's all folks! I just wanted to get that out there! For any of my followers reading that are reading this, you can go back to my story and see the changes that I've made to the title. If you look hard enough you can see it. In fact, here's a little bit of it that I changed. It's not much, but it's something at least
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Ever since she was a filly, Son Goku Kakarot Shenron was not your typical everyday mare, or everyday pony. In fact, being born into a family of Pegasus ponies that has the magic, powers, and blood of a Dragon at your disposal leaves you living a life that is anything but normal.
Thanks for reading my blog post for this month, everypony! Until next time, peace
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Its ok you'll get use't to the hard criticism besides its helpful "Any idea is a good idea except the not so happy ones, those you push deep down inside where you will never ever, EVER!!! find them
'' lol unikitty quote.
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! I agree with you on that one! Those ideas that will pull you into that spiraling depth is HORRIBLE
!!! One of the main reasons why I try to be as polite as I can when giving feedback, cause I don’t like it when other people’s feelings are hurt
. Especially a lady’s
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Thanks
It's ok I only use criticism when it's necessary when i read something i take small references and add it too to my own stories but in my words upgrading than give it about a year and youll do just fine and hey if you need any Ocs drawn just ask
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! I’ll let you know if I have any
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Sweet